|Reviews for The Secrets We Keep|
| guest chapter 27 . 12/21/2015
It's not 'cob ash', it's 'kibosh'.
These types of mistakes are rampant throughout this entire story. It's very distracting.
Character traits/back stories are established in one chapter, only to be completely changed later on.
Way too much 'tell' and not enough 'show'.
Reasons given for most thoughts and actions are unbelievable and/or awkward.
I don't like leaving negative reviews but... how will the author know what to work on to improve if someone doesn't tell her?
| Bakergrama chapter 47 . 6/28/2015
| 84gemstone chapter 16 . 6/28/2015
I thought Edward left Jess after finding her in the bathroom with one dick in her mouth and the other in her ass? Why would he even go back to that.
| 84gemstone chapter 3 . 6/27/2015
Sorry I'm goin to ask how old Bella is? In the UK you leave school at 16 but I think it's older in the U.S. Then how old is Edward? I'm guessing older. I can't see Bella being mad that Edward took her ex out. If anything he saved her from him. He was a little boy playing man. Edward is the man lol
| Vtweetymccn chapter 43 . 6/20/2015
Couldn't he tell Carlisle he was busy taking care of Bella? Lol!
| Denninelli chapter 47 . 6/6/2015
Totally loved it. Read in one day. Now to go to your profile to look for the stories mentioned.
| Judyblue95 chapter 39 . 5/21/2015
subtle, not saddle. gesture, not jester.
| Judyblue95 chapter 38 . 5/21/2015
prowess, not proneness. callous, not callus.
| Judyblue95 chapter 27 . 5/21/2015
| Judyblue95 chapter 18 . 5/21/2015
This reader LOVES the recap!
| Judyblue95 chapter 17 . 5/21/2015
I'm sorry. I know you asked to be told about spelling and grammar mistakes but I just can't. There have been, and continue to be anywhere from 2 to 10 mistakes in each chapter. I enjoy the story and know what you mean through these errors but I won't point them out anymore. In my experience that only makes the writer angry. I do very much enjoy this story!
| Judyblue95 chapter 15 . 5/21/2015
outdo not out due. last paragraph.
| Judyblue95 chapter 14 . 5/21/2015
eavesdropping...first line correction.
| Judyblue95 chapter 10 . 5/21/2015
hi i'm back again today for more! ooh Jessica is in for a rude awakening!
| Judyblue95 chapter 5 . 5/20/2015
I really like what you're doing with this recap stuff. I've never seen that done before.
I do see that Edward has some issues here and love the names you've given him.