Reviews for Pieces out of Line
Googlemo chapter 1 . 4/23
Bad, Del.
The Writer Of Fate chapter 3 . 4/12
You turned Ren into a Nara?
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Neat.
Guest chapter 1 . 4/7
no offence but your grammar feels too stiff at times as if there's no emotion in the words, so, this is just a suggestion but maybe see if someone will beta your story or get someone to proof read it so it doesn't come across as dull when the characters are speaking. Again just a suggestion. Apart from that this story is interesting and i think you could do really well with this, so until then cant wait for more and hope you take this into consideration thank you.
adv chapter 30 . 4/2
great chapter
Kuro kaze no aka kira chapter 1 . 3/30
Huh. Jaune's axed? Shame. Interesting stuff, though.
PredatorPuck chapter 23 . 3/1
Complete AU indeed
PredatorPuck chapter 17 . 3/1
Hahah poor shirou, but how the hell shirou know magecraft
PredatorPuck chapter 15 . 3/1
Huh so completely AU then?
PredatorPuck chapter 13 . 3/1
Hahah superhero shirou
PredatorPuck chapter 11 . 3/1
Hmm Shirou could be good teacher... I can see it clearly
PredatorPuck chapter 10 . 2/28
Oooh scary Shirou!
PredatorPuck chapter 9 . 2/28
Hahahah I can totally see Yang trying to seduce Shirou and failing especially when he is in fight mode
PredatorPuck chapter 8 . 2/28
Hahahaha Shirou truly have serious woman problem no matter what and where
PredatorPuck chapter 7 . 2/28
Huh character development chapter
PredatorPuck chapter 4 . 2/28
Yeah I was wondering why nobody helped the Faunus girl, but Shirou being Shirou would of course help people in need
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