Reviews for The First To Roam
Bookworm7493 chapter 4 . 7/14
I love this story it would be total shame if it where to be. Left alone plz update and finish this story’s destiny aka to be finished!
lyra2908 chapter 1 . 7/4
update please
hiyukihime2 chapter 4 . 11/15/2017
update please update
Guest chapter 4 . 10/14/2017
Update this
RennyKitty147 chapter 4 . 10/3/2017
Is this abandoned..?
Because I really like this... And I don't compliment many Fics.
This is actually kinda inspiring for ideas.
Shy-Bi-And-Ready-To-Cry chapter 4 . 1/1/2017
Please update
Eminsonforever chapter 4 . 10/23/2016
This is a great story please update it.
Sebastian chapter 2 . 10/10/2016
First of all sorry for my bad spelling and granar.

This line "thanks to my awesome science capabilities" i cant hellp it butt it just feels out of place in a caracter that is (if i understand it right) first imortal in my mind it makes her sound stupid, and that your Bella at the moment feels like an clone off all the other fics with imortal/filthy rich Bella that buys everything the author wants in her/his life. Makes this fic average this do not mean that i hate it just that it dint hook me like som fanfiction and books do.

PS. Keep on wrighting and you will create that epic fanfic or original story that will hook its Claws in your readers and never lett go i see great potential in your wrighting.
Emily779 chapter 4 . 8/11/2016
PLEASE UPDATE THIS STORY!
Guest chapter 4 . 7/26/2016
Please do more chapters ¡!
Guest chapter 4 . 7/23/2016
This is a Mary Sue
indigobenson23 chapter 4 . 6/28/2016
Is there more to this story?
Tilty.bbb chapter 4 . 6/7/2016
This is great i hope it gets an update
Jessicashadow8897 chapter 4 . 6/5/2016
Please continue the story, really want to know how it continues
Emily779 chapter 4 . 5/10/2016
more please
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