This is pretty alright.. however having Exalt is completely unnecessary. Other than adding some internal conflict for the humans it adds nothing to the actual plot. It is uninteresting and somewhat annoying actually, not even worth as a side plot. You should have left them out after the introductory history.

Why does they care about the element zero dust? Even if the iconoclast isn't made to filter toxins either their armor they're wearing underneath it or the iconoclast armor itself is a seal environment with it own air supply, otherwise they would have just died in space on the trip over. What, did they take their helmets off once aboard or for some reason unsealed their suit? Seems like an oversight to me.

FUCKING RETARD

please try to format your story in smaller chapters, these are 25 000 words each and it's almost impossible to read correctly because of that.

Hope this story isn’t dead keep up the good work.

Shitfic. Fuck that asari cuntrag.

Amazing story, can’t wait for an update

thank you for a great read wherever life finds you now i hope you know there are people who still enjoy what parts of your creativity you share with us via your stories. thank you for your time and patience!

A good story! Too bad this seems to be dead considering it hasn't been updated in 4 years

I don't understand why the Annihilation was wasting it's strongest attack, a 3-kilometer long fusion lace, on cruisers instead of the dreadnoughts or even the Destiny Ascension.

Dud it's ok, embrace the bro side of the force, chillax man, I get it, you were beszy bro, this is supposed to be fun maaan, the power of the bro Side of the force compels you braaw.

How quickly it turned to shit...simply amazing.

Right. The Shepard's story. And what an original story it would have been, something no one has ever written before...ever...

Regarding your assertion that the Quarians "Did the same thing that the Turian's did here with their Liveships" (mounted dreadnought-scale guns) - No.
The Quarians Liveships were essentially Dreadnought sized passenger liners, which the Quarians then retrofitted with Actual (kilometre long) Dreadnought cannon for the attack on Rannoch. These pseudo-dreadnoughts had all the characteristics of a Dreadnought (slow, sluggish, high-damage), minus the armour. They did not (indeed, Could Not) fit Dreadnought sized main guns to frigate scale vessels. had they (or, indeed, anyone) tried, the extra weight and length would have crippled the vessels speed and manoeuvrability, even assuming they could manage to power the thing.

That said, however EMV2 (kinetic energy of the projectile is equal to Mass times it's velocity squared). they could have increased the mass of the projectile, whilst adding extra Element Zero circuits in the barrel to reduce that mass, effectively firing a greater mass at the same velocity. Whilst less efficient and shorter ranged than a true Dreadnought (there is a reason they scale the guns the way they do, after all) it would allow you to put your Turian plan into action.

I would, however, still not give the frigates Dreadnought level firepower - uprating Frigates to Cruiser firepower and Cruisers to Dreadnought level seems more balanced, whilst still effective. This sort of upgrade could also be performed 'in-situ' with minimal effort, rather than getting a specialised shipyard to rip out and replace the main gun. Though I do question the speed with which your Turians were apparently able to refit their navy. Perhaps there was an unstated timeskip?

First few chapters seem good, but I just can't take a sci-fi like this seriously. You know, one that uses the word "mankind" in it's summary.