|Reviews for On Each Other's Teams|
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 15 . 5/28/2019
What a wonderful, wonderful ending. I loved it. The stolen pencils, the mending-of-previously-festering-wounds goodbye, his sincere-or-possibly-not admission and the very characteristic "I can't tell if you're lying" / "I guess you'll have to live with that."
And the final lines. Oh my word. Jane, you go girl. Go save the world.
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 13 . 5/28/2019
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 7 . 5/28/2019
Oh. Oh, damn.
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 6 . 5/28/2019
I pulled up Google Translate for Odindad's benefit before remembering ffn dot net doesn't let you copy-paste things. I'm thankful that you put a translation at the end. I'm very interested in the use of different languages for storytelling purposes, especially hidden compliments. And I think you write them true (which is the best thing a fanfic writer can do) including things like "it makes Jane a little sick to see how genuinely happy Thor is to see his brother." That really captures the canon bros. :/
JANE JANE JANE I LOVE YOU SO
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 5 . 5/28/2019
I enjoy you casually referring to him as an unhinged kleptomaniac and things like "the third drawer is full of pencils."
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 4 . 5/28/2019
How like him to wait for an excuse to start a bar fight. It really did feel like a hysterical laughter kind of night. I liked it. Even without the promise of sailing ships. ;)
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 3 . 5/28/2019
AWKWARD FAMILY REUNION REVEALS YISSSSS
Less delightful is that he'd pretend not to know her. But of course he would. Careless jerkassery is his thing. And so is the game of pushing Jane's buttons when she starts ignoring him. And so is screwing with his brother. I too would punch him.
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 2 . 5/28/2019
Ahh, I loved this bit:
"He had a comeback for everything. He always knows which buttons to press. His pranks are mean, his tongue is sharp, his arrogance is appalling. He's a compulsive liar and a kleptomaniac and hands-down the most amoral person Jane has ever met.
She passes the next philosophy test with flying colours."
His wily nonchalance is on point, as are Thor's gushy romantics. I loved "I think you're allergic to direct questions" / "I wouldn't know, as I've never answered one." That whole conversation was very characteristic of him.
| midnightsnapdragon chapter 1 . 5/28/2019
I love your dry tone of (writing) voice. The way they all meet each other is fitting, as is Thor's conditional forgiveness (that she have a pint with him). How very like him.
| Pentastic chapter 15 . 2/14/2019
This is very well done and quite sad. while not the ending i had hoped for, it is fitting. good job!
| nklewisgmail.com chapter 15 . 9/16/2018
I am DEVASTATED that this is over. I really love the characters you created. This is a wonderful story- great pacing, strong motivations, just enough tension to propel the story forward, and a fleshed-out backstory without overstated exposition. You’re a real writer. Thank you for sharing your gift!
| nklewisgmail.com chapter 13 . 9/16/2018
Oh my God. This story is kicking the crap out of my heart.
| ArrogantSlytherin chapter 15 . 7/2/2018
Hands down the best thing I've read all week. We'll ignore the fact that it's Monday and take the sentiment as it's intended, yeah?
| Guest chapter 15 . 4/29/2018
This was an amazing 15 chapters! Loved every second of it. I think what I liked most was that Jane retained her independence despite having been drawn in by either guy. Excellent read.
| trontroy chapter 15 . 4/10/2018
Really enjoyed this, quite a rollercoaster ride filled with emotions cos it’s funny and sad at the same time. Pls
Continue writing Thor fanfics!