okay, LOVE this fic so far. however, if you decide to do another alongside this fic, PLEASE rayship the hell out of it lol

When May going to show up and there also going to be lemons.

nice man of steel reference in archeus's speech.

its a good story looking forward to seeing where it leads, on a side note though for the Naruto story you are planning it might be better to pick an actual Shinto goddess (like Amateratsu/Fem Shinigami etc) you hardly ever see them used as actual people and I think it gives more of a feeling of actual personality as opposed to a Mary Sue. Also the word Kami is more of an all over type title for gods/goddesses (it almost literally translates to Divine/Divines and one of the more common "Profanities" used in proper context is "by the thousand and one Kami") most times you see it in fics its authors trying to hammer a square peg into a round hole of (Christian/Islamic) god in heaven Kami and Satan/opposite in hell Yami and I've find it doesn't really mesh well and most stories they appear in just flop because of this, This is just My opinion though good luck with whatever you decide though I look forward to reading it.

this fics awesome cant wait for more

Interesting story.
But really, 10y Ash defeating 3 fighting pokemon at once with any of them perform a hit on him is too much for me. Ash is maybe badass, but that badass is more like superman than human. At least ash could be exhausted with few bruises on his body and face.

It never occurred to me that all the guys in Brock's family would be like him. XD

Nice to see Ash's dad helping out, if only from a distance.

I was not expecting those two Bug-types to be used in a fight like that, a Rocket fight no less. Good job, guys!

(DR. ZAGERRRRRR Zetson is funny, but this is a mad scientist chapter!)

FEAROW GET
And free Moon Stones, yay
Oh, and Cleffa get

Speech Ash, speech! I actually imitated the Spartans' shout at the end of it. Don't forget, Pikachu, pain is weakness leaving the body!

I giggled immaturely at Ash the mack. Hey, it got him three (well, four) good fights and a badge! Now, if only he could teach Brock a few things...

Wow, when I read this I thought, LOVE IT! How he defeated all those Rocket Grunts, got a new pokemon and got his next badge. And how he's a charmer! Just one question, how will you divide the gyms? Because I know there are 18 types of Pokemon, which could be used for them, but the rest, will you repeat some? Looking forward to more!

Oh. . No harem, eh? Well I guess I understand so I won't flame. But still, I EFFING LOVE THE STORY SO FAR! U ROCK! Signing off,
SilverCanon.
(P.S, please give Ash a Gibble, Sawk, Riolu, Archen, and a shiny Magikarp, pleaaaaaseee).

WHAT THE HELLLLLLLLL?! THIS IS THE BEST POKEMON FANFIC I HAVE EVER READ AND I'M ONLY ON CHAPTER TWO! I'M PRACTICALLY BREAKING INTO HYSTERICS AND BUBBLING WITH EXCITRMEMT! ARE YOU PSYCHO?! THIS HAS AN EXCELLENT WRITING STYLE! OH MY GOD! OH MY GOD! (Coughs in embarrassment) hmmh. Sorry, first time I've broken into a rant like that. That only increases my view of the story though (grins sheepishly). Ummm... I don't usually make requests for the protagonists love interests... but can you add Skyla to it? Pleaaaase! That would only increase my love of this story and I just might encourage others to read it...(hint hint, foreshadowing!) Signing off,
SilverCanon.

good chapter

Your Naruto one sounds extremely stupid. God like Naruto seems interesting in the start, but gets boring way way too soon.

One of the things I dont know whether I like or resent about you is the things you like in your previous AN. You seem to be a person who is very opposed to constructive criticism, taht's not good. While you are a good writer, you most certainly are not perfect, so don't be so much against criticism.

Your chapters are very long and nicely written, that's an extremely positive point, but your mental image of Ash does not simply match up with what could he be in reality. Even after all that training and whatnot, he would never have been able to defeat fighting types. Same for this chapter, Lily, Violet and the third sister would never ever be blushing over the words of a 10 year old boy, no matter how mature.

Thats just friggin stupid.

Keep a believable outlook to your story. I know that you will probably delete my comment as soon as you read the first line, but really, I am trying to help you. Dont insert stupid things like Teenaged and mature girls blushing over the words of a 10 year old kid. I hope you take my advise seriously.

if you ask me you should just write how you want. if you want ash to catch a thousand pokemon from each region do it, if you want him to be super smart and strong do it. my point is write how you want no matter what anyone else says including me. if we give you ideas it's still your story so you don't have to use them but it would be cool if you did.

Later P1#fan

your story rocks i love it. i think you should do an egg hunt and what i mean be that is where people gather to compete in finding pokemon eggs. they can use one pokemon they think will help them best in finding eggs in a certain time frame and any eggs they find they can keep. but the eggs are going to be eggs that are bout to hatch because nobody can or wants to carry around a bunch of eggs. if you use this idea which you don't have to, but if you do this you should have ash find 7 or 8 evee eggs's he can have all of evee's evolutions.

i don't know why but evee and all of it evolution are some of my favorite pokemon and i always thought ash should have one or all of them then there's vulpix and ponyta i also love them and think ash should of had one. i just think evee and it's evolution, vulpix and ponyta are amazing. again you don't have to use this idea it's your story not mine write however want you either way it will still be amazing. i just thought of this idea when i was thinking of your story and thought it was cool.

can't wait till the next up date.

Later

I like your story but do not know if this story is Advanceshipping?
Because I think it is time for May appears.
I think it's time to get involved in the story.
I want to see what he would be traveling to Ash with her.
Since the beginning of the fic, I expected to read about May.
For everything else, this very well.
Keep it up!