Is it done yet?

lorax meme

Don’t listen to these people telling you not to save others nor the simple haters. They are just too used and addicted to the pain in life they don’t realise what a real happy life can be if they see a story where everybody lives and is happy in which they are simply too used to and addicted to the pain. I am a suicidal person who can tell you that although there is cringe, your story is capable of making me feel happy as there is enough pain in the world both in the news and in real life, a story where as many people are happy, is one that is perfect. The thing i would like though is for Luffy to eventually overcome his trauma and become a better person in which is something that we with such trauma should all inspire to do.

Hello, been a reader of this story for years and honestly though, i am a little surprised you are actually still wishing to go and rewrite this to be honest nonetheless glad you are. Though if possible, can you please make sure no Skypiean will join the crew as i feel Oda had a very good reason for that later. Also on a personal suggestion now that we are this far in the story. Perhaps at some point, add a Lunarian into the mix as i feel like having someone like that amongst the crew will be of great help in the long run. Or maybe one of those experimental Seraphim Pacifistas like they time travelled into the past thanks to the guy with the Open Open fruit (sorry if i got the name wrong) took the opportunity to bring the S-Bear, S-Shark, S-Snake & S-Hawk to the current timeline and had S-Snake grow up enough (like she trains for 18 years or so to be a young adult) so that she can be with Luffy as a young adult or 18 years old and the guy with the Open Open fruit Opens their Free Will.
As S-Snake awoke her host’s memory of being in love with Luffy. These 4 Seraphim Pacifistas in particular are born from Warlords who oppose & hate the World Government and can “Open” their memories of hatred to the Tenryubito as kids, can grow stronger and help the Strawhats in their early days with the time travel available (with S-Snake growing up to become the eldest). Maybe have them join up in Skypiea as the world government would still hunt them for being Lunarians or maybe even inbetween Marineford and Impel Down. Maybe have S-Snake as the adult and keep the other 3 as children. With S-Hawk aspiring to improve under Zoro whose potential would grow quite faster if the Open Open guy opens Zoro’s memories of the future and thus unlock his skills to be stronger. Also S-Hawk i feel should have another fruit ability other than Dice Dice as something else to power his sword skill like something like the Spark Spark fruit. Sorry but i am a big fan of those 4 Seraphim Pacifistas and their potential.
Also, all due respect when I suggest this but Valerie could use a fruit replacement as the Kilo Kilo fruit is redundant to the Ton Ton fruit. Maybe another one of those Food fruits like a Paramecia or Logia Choc Choc as she wants to be a chocolatier. Though of course this would require either Blackbeard to steal the fruit to which she later finds the Choc Choc on Skypiea or Open Open guy has Valerie eat the Choc Choc fruit instead of the Kilo Kilo. Maybe also give S-Hawk a different fruit ability other than Dice Dice. Maybe something to equip with Swordsmanship like maybe the Spark Spark or maybe another Logia fruit in which his green blood is taken away for ordinary green blood and then he is able to eat a logia or a mythical zoan.
Also give Sanji a little break like he hooks up with random woman he meets at certain ports & islands. Or at least give the other boys some womanly action at the ports but of course, “NO TOUCHING LUFFY’S HAREM”. Maybe just mention that they did hooked up with random women rather than write a lemon scene of the crew just to make things fair.
And of course Ace, maybe have Ace just go into a coma but still alive in Marineford in which the Whitebeard pirates would take care of a comatosed Ace as he takes an almost fatal hit from Akainu.
Also good on keeping the Gum Gum fruit as we now know what it is and how it plays into the whole lore and being the arch enemy of the world government. Luffy in this timeline has yet to unlock the Gear 5: Nika form even in this situation and also has to train too as he will eventually face Kaido, Big Mom and the Gorosei (the demons), Tenryubito and Imu who are stronger than Luffy at the moment. In the original timeline, CP0 Guernica doesn’t interfere in Luffy and Kaido’s fight and thus Luffy defeated Kaido with that attack and did not awaken Nika but in this new timeline he will and thus Luffy awakens Nika but he needs to train more as Stussy showed advanced versions of Rokushiki and also master the Nika form and unlock the other abilities such as the “Sun/Fire” abilities as he can only do Red Roc and Red Hawk and “Freedom” which is only limited to Luffy’s imagination. Maybe even have Stussy of the original timeline join in to help prevent the death of Stella Vegapunk in this timeline but under a different alias so that the new timeline Stussy would not be under suspicion. Also i don’t know if you know but Nika has a lot of lore built into One Piece as the Sun. Relations to the Sun Pirates, Elbaf’s celebrating of the Death and Rebirth of the Sun, Otohime’s reverence of the Sun, the word “Nika” in Japan means Smile like D if you rotate it, Nike for Victory/to conquer in Greece, Skypiea’s cross in Enel’s throneroom has one of a Christian Cross with a Sun-like symbol in the middle likewise to Kuma’s Nika church with the Christian Cross with a Sun on the symbol. Luffy’s shadowed silhouette in the camp fire of Skypiea is shaped like Nika. IC XC NIKA one of the symbols of Jesus meaning Jesus Christ conquers and connection in a way to Jesus is the fact that Luffy’s defeat and awakening as Nika is done on the roof of “Skull Dome” of Onigashima, Oda is a genius in this regard as Jesus was crucified on Mt Golgotha which is the Hebrew word for “SKULL”. Oda is a real genius in this regard or it is fate as he said he didn’t intend to take One piece too far in the first place. It is all in the trivia of Nika in the One Piece Wiki and it shows you how everything is connected. It really gives you chills and makes you realise why Luffy’s fruit must stay as the Gum Gum fruit and how his lore plays into this.
Either way, glad you are going through with the rewrite. And hope you read this to have you know how much i like your story and the haters who don’t really have anything better to do can go find something better to do. Either Way, Good Luck with the Story and Have a Good Day.

I hate this shit,I hope he will not fool around during fight so I keep ,he fool around so much,its annoying

C'mon,it's not fanfic at 's waste too much time during fight,always fool around need him to fight serious all the time,not like the original,shithead

Want something easy? The crew should be damned suspicious of this guy who knows all about them.

Especially Nami. Nami does not trust.

Don't solve every problem.

Remember, Luffy lost everyone. He also loved everyone. All the way. Sanji as much as Nami. Not saying you have to convert any of that into physical attraction, but the eeling was there.

GOOD LUCK ON THE REWRITE!
And to the people who left those hurtful comments, they can go fuck themselves. Criticism is one thing, but dont go to far with it.
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I see.

Well, good luck with Rewrite! Looking forward to it.

Earth Beast

It's wrong before time skip we can't see haki because it's invisible. It was only shown so that we can see it

Takes a lot of dedication to rewrite everything you’ve done to that 114th chapter. I believe in you! I have faith!

So this is just a recap story where luffy does nothing to change things despite knowing what is going to happen? If not when do things change? I’m not really interested in “he pretended not to know and let it happen” repeatedly.

I apologize on behalf of my fellow readers for any nasty comment sent your way. Some people should really adhere to the old saying 'if you have nothing nice to say, don't say anything at all'.

I'd also like to add that it's perfectly normal for there to be little change to the adventure, as Luffy & Co are still going the same route and meeting the same people as before. The REAL change will begin at Sabaody since I don't think the 2 year time skip will happen again.

I must be the only reader who doesn't find the whole thing funny about Sanji getting mad at Luffy.

Luffy has already lived through all this and knows what's going to happen and even so, he doesn't do anything to avoid it (this whole moment in the cage could have been avoided by him) he loses little of the advantage he should have had by going back in time