It was pretty good in my opinion since Luffys lack of understanding on what to do

People will bash down on people they are jealous of, that’s why I rarely trash on people for being able to do something that I can’t now, just cause 1 it’s too much effort and also don’t let them get to you, they are just randos with their dicks in their hands probably not doing anything where as you are putting yourself out there doing fan fics

Keep going please. Franky Brook

Divie back
Water 7
Eines lobby
Thriller bark
Etc.

Hey I'm not angry I was hoping for the rewrite and I can wait but the others are idiots for rushing things every good are those doesn't rush if you rush it, it might some mistakes so I understand I was hoping for you to have already made it yet so I will wait

Diculik? Tidak masuk akal

Greg? His name is Gem.
Grace? Her name is Marrianne.
By the way, Valerie is Mikita...

Don't change the names...

Really weird. Luffy wants to change history but so far nothing has changed except the number of crew members. He is still stupid and dumb except for his extra liking for women. With his strength he should be able to beat his opponents easily.

Why didn't he tell ace that he was going to lose against Blackbeard? It would be ridiculous if he was given a second chance but didn't do anything

It's boring because it's no different from the original story. Luffy remains dumb as usual even if he is from the future. His strength didn't help much if he remained dumb and never took anything serious

Why does Luffy like to play games when he can win easily? Does he have a goal to do that? What a waste of time and underestimating everything like he did in his previous life

Kenapa luffy tidak mencoba melatih awak kapalnya haki?

SAMA PERSIS DENGAN ANIME TIDAK ADA KREATIFITAS SAMA SEKALI TIDAK ADA PERUBAHAN BAHKAN DENGAN KEKUATAN DAN KENANGAN LUFFY. LALU APA TUJUAN ANDA PENULIS? BAHKAN JIKA LUFFY KUAT TAPI TIDAK MELAKUKAN SESUATU YANG BERBEDA BUKANKAH HANYA AKAN MENGULANG KEJADIAN YANG SAMA? KECUALI BAGIAN MENAMBAH JUMLAH KRU

TIDAK ADA YANG BARU SEMUA PERSIS SAMA DENGAN ONE PIECE ASLI SEPERTI COPY PASTE. INI BUKAN FANFIC TAPI MENYALIN

Hey there, I like your fanfic about time travel Luffy and his mind opened to beauties but I don't understand why you would invite Yosaku, Johnny, and even Nojiko thoo. I didn't said the fanfic is bad or anything but it's just a friendly critique

Hi there
I wish you the best of luck with the rewrite, I am looking forward to it when it comes. And despite what some may say I did enjoy the original work