Reviews for Master of the Force: Book 1
wormrepo chapter 8 . 11/6
It appears you made magic somewhat redundant in the face of the Force. Now raw power wise the Force is far more destructive, unless and until canon HP magic user decides to create a few hundreds pounds of anti matter and even then the potential still isn't as great.

Enhancing the body with magic is possible, potions and the like which do exist in canon, but generally Force is greater and they can decide when and how to use those enhancements.

Now with versatility magic wins out. Mind control of different kinds, making various types and levels of invisibility or spells to hide things in different dimensions, expanding dimensions, making things unbreakable or resistant to the elements, protecting the mind, raising zombies, cheating death, portraits that are semi-alive, wards of all kinds, creating and manipulating the elements, multiple types of flight, multiple types of teleportation, healing, potions, alchemy, and while it was a Goblin blade there exists metals that can absorb the properties of things such as highly acidic/poisonous substances.

While Force can do things as well, that list above? It isn't even nearly the end. Force can heal but not anywhere near what magic can do, it can cheat death though not in the same way, holocrons instead of portraits, etc. But in the end the things it can do, magic that is, is greater.

After all you have Harry use magic to hide the room from sensing when he shows his true power. Even something as simple as changing the color of one thing to another, and this doesn't even touch on transfiguration or conjuration..

Moving on you had him fight Revan. Revan, as in one of the most powerful beings in the Force of all time. And during that fight you have multiple masters just standing there doing nothing at all. No knights tried to help, not even his own Mother and said master of Tonks.

It makes no sense, at all. And it goes against everything canon for the Jedi, along with changing how everyone is so much I can't see them helping with anything at all, ever.

I still would like you to update the story at some point. Hopefully you are alive and just lost interest in things here. But if you do some day come back my unasked for advice is to redo the last chapter at least.

You also have Fay leaving Harry to do so many things when she could have stepped in during the earlier chapters. He was a padawan then and honestly from what I know no true Jedi would have them do those things on and on and on.

Plus a few chapters ago you had her say Harry could destroy an entire world and the moon of said planet, well all life anyway. You would think she would have mentioned that Long before that point but nope. Nothing. Nodda.

Didn't he already use those ability before to? And go on to use that Force Light to get rid of the thing anyways? Yeah, there needs to be some edits I feel.
Oddballzebra chapter 1 . 10/29
How the hell has he mastered all these force abilities? He's only eleven. Gary Stu much? It was so ridiculous, I couldn't even get through the first chapter.
Guest chapter 1 . 10/22
Really fucking RETARDED
Akane Mosoa chapter 4 . 10/18
Believe it or not but Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic is considered canon wihich is where Battle Meditation came from. please note it IS force/battle meditation, not meld. Force meld is a different ability altogether.
Yoda900 chapter 8 . 9/23
Hi! Great story! I Hope you are still writing this and it isn't dead.
lalo80 chapter 4 . 8/1
Te felicito es una buena historia, ojala la continues
Matt Bigham chapter 8 . 5/18
Terrific story and flawless merging of wizarding and the je daii. I look forward to seeing a continuation of this story. Pairing Harry Potter with Nymphodora Tonks and Master Day also Master Kuro is brilliant and erotic considering Master Fay's background.
Zomvee chapter 8 . 5/13
Darth Knight, that got me to fucking laugh enough to start crying because of the pain it caused.
Don't worry laughing hard and long can caused that, lmao and yes you can use that in your story if you want to.
Alex TF chapter 8 . 3/12
Hope to hear from you soon. Great work.
Alex TF chapter 7 . 3/12
Awesome chapter
PwnerofHeroes chapter 2 . 2/25
decent enough so far skipping over things makes sense, i would suggest going into more depth with character interactions though, particularly fay and tonks, it will help establish the characters and their relationships more effectively as well as being more interesting to read
Nightfox97 chapter 8 . 2/6
update! really like the story so far and the integration of both universes is awesome
Incursio456 chapter 8 . 1/19
Awesome story i was hooked and i finished reading the last chapter and im like damnit because it was getting good
Blazeb79 chapter 8 . 1/16
At first i was worried about how fast paced the first couple chapters were, that is until we passed the HP storyline and got to the good stuff! Story is much more bada$$ now and i cant wait for more.
Blazeb79 chapter 7 . 1/16
That was the best chapter of the whole story! So much awesomeness in one chapter !
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