I certainly like it and would love to read more.
I can only hope that it's possible someday soon.

I think it's a good start. One punctuation error. So, reading this, I can't help feeling like I'm reading an ending cutscene rather than an actual story. You have a promising beginning at the start, but then you abruptly shift to the end of the tournament. I think it could have used more build-up and would be interested in seeing Jaune's progress during the tournament itself. Overall, though, it is a good start.

So I like this I can't give writing advice so I'm useless but I like it

I say contune with this one... I would love to see what his reaction would be to the RWBY World...

this could be good it shal be watched!