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Looks like a good fanfiction with a good idea and execution, but the author's writing style is TOO chaotic. And chaotic does not mean 'unpredictable', but chaotic. Incomprehensible inserts, strange decisions of the author, lack of a clear direction of the plot, etc.
If you have nothing else to read, you can try, but this fanfic is definitely not for everyone.

Dollars instead of ryo. "How to knock a reader out of a story 101."

Bruh did the game just give Jiraiya the Necronomicon?

Wtf is this chapter? Did you just give up the writing?

Why party members are bad?
It’s bad because they’re fuding ninjas, people are fickle things. Shikamaru as made a slouch and loyal to fault, that character work well with the party reveal, even more so with the curiosity of his. What don’t fall well is the others. You can’t expect that children ninjas that are from well known clans will keep shut and not plan any betrayal for their own benefits. It just doesn’t make sense. A plot would have to follow something I the lines to at least show the dangers of a bad choice in party that could endanger Naruto’s or the whole village. Also you now have to make more screentime to the party crew, doing so at the expense of your own worldbuilding.
Having your character building based on Naruto’s change of worldview by the videogame perspective in a way that he affected the growth of his friends would be much more seamless and better to follow and see.

Now the story is more bloated and convoluted and the hard part where the POVs changes didn’t even begin.

spent all day binging this story. 10/10. so refreshing to see a naruto litrpg get past the chuunin exams, never thought id see one completed. usually not one for epilogues but this one was really good, ill always want more gamer elements in stories, but this absolutely scratched an itch and i know ill be coming back to reread in another month or two. thanks for writing!

I really don’t like them knowing about Naruto game I mean shika I get but the rest of them no just no

Noooooooooo why did he have toad:(

Very good story but the curse seal of Orochimaru would never work on Naruto. The second that would happen Naruto would lose control and the nine tails chakra activate eating away the curse seal there's no way orochimaru's chakra/will is more powerful than nine tails. That's why Danzo seal wouldn't work on Naruto as well it would literally eat the other seal.

Was good until Danzo took Naruto. Naurto signed the toads summoning. Jiraiya could instantly reverse summon Naruto back to the hospital. No seals or barriers can stop that. Track it summon PA or Ma have them de-summon and some Naruto to the toad Mountain from there to Ryan can we summon him back to the hospital

Ok a few things but ANBU are high level chunin/special skills or jonin. They are not a level higher than jonin. Kakashi was jonin/anbu at 10-11. As he learned more about his position he earned anbu captain. Also kakashi himself said naruto has more chakra than himself by about 4-10 times the ammount. Naruto can make about 50 shadow clones when Kakashi can make about 10-14. Naruto was wasting chakra when he made those 50. At age 15 he made enough clones to pick every leave from a tree.

Why the heck couldn’t you just try getting the recipe before choosing a mutation?!

Unfortunately pretty bad story all told. Good start, but then suddenly pretty much abandons most of the game elements and uses the idiot ball way too often. Pity.