Reviews for When Signing a Contract, Always Read the Fine Print
legunter11 chapter 42 . 7/4/2020
Great story! Best video game story I have read, thanks for finishing it. Looking forward to reading your other stuff.
silversnitch4765 chapter 25 . 6/14/2020
I like his friends being apart of the game but he should def be a badass! I know the story is finished, I read it a while ago and just reading it through again, I forget most of it by now.
Kage-Shino chapter 26 . 5/16/2020
Blond is the male version, yes.
anon chapter 42 . 5/6/2020
beautiful ending
absolutely amazing
I would go on a huge rant about how you called on emotions we've all felt, and about how you embodied and worded life as a concept in this story, but i dont know how to say all that, so all i can give is my thanks.
JustDusty chapter 8 . 4/30/2020
Is this even a Naruto fanfic? All i've seen so far is some retarded kid running around town learning all kinds of stupid pointless things just to date a chick.
i could live with naruto being just retarded but a medic nin, seriously? the least you could've done was make it a sakura centric fanfic or something
Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 11 . 4/15/2020
I just love that... Flipping "Sasuke and Unimportant" sounds like something a civilian council member from a crappy fanfiction would say. The best part is that it's done by the narrator in a just over half decent fanfiction story
Triolan chapter 42 . 2/20/2020
I honestly didn't expect this. This went from a fun story about a power gaming Naruto to a discussion on the nature of life and existence. The ending feels kinda bittersweet to be honest. I just expected a cut and dry happy end but this feels... lonely? I dunno. I'm going to have to take a few minutes to process but I can say that, despite my confusion about the ending and the Madara fight, this was genuinely fun to read and had me laughing quite often. Thanks for writing this.
pepejohn chapter 42 . 2/4/2020
What a read! 9.5/10

Good stuff!
Guest chapter 24 . 1/26/2020
party systems are the bane of gamer fics, I think the inclusion is the biggest mistake in this story.
sharkjumping chapter 22 . 1/26/2020
If anyone should pay reparations it should be the foreigners who were unable to control their own Jinchuuriki, and let all their forces be infiltrated. Forces that shouldn't even be there at all!

The whole Kage meeting is pretty contrived, Jiraiya would in no way ever accept those terms, and them just flipflopping makes no sense considering Fu's complete lack of charisma.
jiraiya would never accept such a harebrained ultimatum. It would shit on all that Konoha stands for, not the mention that the Hyuuga clan would never accept it, and he would never give away Minato's jutsu like that.

It feels like the characters are just forced to fit your plot, rather than you trying to write them like real people with a bit of common sense.
It should be super obvious that Orochimaru is the real enemy so it's a gaping plot hole that Jiraiya doesn't even try to blame him when he orchestrated it all and killed the Hokage.

And those thoughts you forced into Jiraiya's head about Danzo are wildly out of character, he would NEVER consider Danzo necessary. And it still makes no sense that he would let Danzo live, after all with the way that Danzo unilaterally acts he can only be considered a traitor who tries to suborn Konoha and bend it to his own will, and who kidnapped a konoha genin.
Guest chapter 21 . 1/26/2020
It makes absolutely no sense that Jiraiya doesn't just kill Danzo, it feels too much like you're giving Danzo plot armor.
Guest chapter 21 . 1/26/2020
"philippic"
A bit of an awkward and pretentious term to use here, also something that doesn't fit the setting, please reword it.
Guest chapter 21 . 1/26/2020
"That gave Jiraiya the credence go with overcaution rather than undercaution"

This is just a mangled mess, for one undercaution isn't a word, and credence doesn't mean what you think it does.

You can just delete the sentence, no need to reword it, and the paragraph would work better.

"And neither was Naruto"
nor was Naruto
typos chapter 20 . 1/26/2020
bold stratagem - bold strategic mind

just that closer to Hokage - just that much closer to becoming Hokage
typos chapter 20 . 1/26/2020
was always self-confidence and a certain dignity - was always self-confident and had a certain dignity
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