Reviews for The Fallen One
lightlordakira154 chapter 2 . 11/3/2014
update soon please its really good.
agnar chapter 2 . 10/27/2014
Uh, yeah, you need to re-work this chapter I think. Death acting like Naruto should have any fucking clue what he is talking about, and Naruto acting like HE has any clue what Death is talking about? Doesn't work.

Naruto either knows nothing about the Uzumaki, or he'd think their 'bloodline' was stamina, dense chakra, longer life. And the whole babbling explanation from Death, it made no sense, to reader or Naruto. What bloodline, why would God reseal Kyuubi, why wouldn't God know Naruto's bloodline activated since it's, ya know, GOD.

The whole thing just needs to be written better.
Yinko chapter 2 . 9/13/2014
I've always liked Koyuki for a pairing, but at best she's a minor add on to a huge harem. This is good though.
Radomir's Renegades chapter 2 . 6/11/2014
This story has merit.
Grounded Forever chapter 1 . 5/4/2014
Looks great!
Elemental77 chapter 1 . 4/10/2014
I hope you update again soon! XD
SushiSauceMaker chapter 1 . 4/9/2014
Ugh! I hate cliffs but that was decent chapter
Unnatural Reader chapter 1 . 4/9/2014
Damn good job
Ending was kinda confusing but other than that I really like tgis story do far
Ornstein the Dragon Slayer chapter 1 . 4/9/2014
A Naruto/Koyuki pairing, that is something I never see now, bravo my man, bravo. Hope this to see more of this.
pain17ification chapter 1 . 4/9/2014
WOO! You made it! Awesome!
redwolf23456 chapter 1 . 4/9/2014
Great story so far