Oh my goodness! I think you have the best next and coming Sakura-centered fiction for the year! Amazing and what interesting spins you've made :) a female uchiha for a team mate and near-genius sakura - i can't wait to see how this develops! very excited :)

Wow, Kakashi is great. Layers beneath layers is how he acts. That's probably gonna be hard for you to constantly be thinking over, but it's good to have multi-faceted characters like that.

Writing continues to be high quality, continuing to serve its purpose in carrying the plot along.

I really appreciate that, while the story is from Sakura's perspective, she doesn't have obvious main-character syndrome. I could imagine the intro chapters being told from Naruto or Izanagi's perspective easy, and they'd come off as just as important. Sakura is honestly the least conventional protagonist of the three.

And it was good of you to give Kakashi something else to do with his time than follow the kids around. It always seemed like a ridiculous waste of the village's resources to have Jounin go on D rank missions. Likewise, good for him to train them.

It was a nice beat to show Izanagi dissatisfied with D missions. She would, but they never said so in canon.

You keep hitting all the bases. You're not skimming over scenes, but you're also not making any obligatory ones boring.

The Kage's speech was well thought out, good idea to make it tie in to the rest of the story in some way. I also liked what Sakura had to say about it.

Ino and Sakura's bond touches me. I hope nothing happens to them.

First things first: YES SOMEONE WROTE A GIRL!SASUKE STORY! It's such an interesting idea, and I've toyed with the idea of writing something for it, but I'm too lazy to write my own fanfic.

Second thing: NOT ONLY DID YOU WRITE GIRL!SASUKE, YOU COMBINED IT WITH SMART!SAKURA AND NONSUCKY!KAKASHI! Just. Yes. YES! 3

Okay, actual review stuff. I love the scientific journal bits. It shows that you've really thought about your version of the Naruto 'verse. It's also a breath of fresh air to portray the non-ninja parts of the world as something besides helpless peasants who are hundreds of years behind ninja in terms of technology, even though they should probably be ahead. I can't wait to see Sakura and co. go out into the world.

I'm glad you're addressing the size of Konoha's ninja forces, and the weirdness of its education system, but I'm really delighted to see you point out that this is child-soldiery. I like that you bumped the graduation age up to 15; it means the characters have more education behind them (which means we get to skip the how-to-not-be-totally-useless parts of training), and it means you can actually do romance without being creepy (soooo many Naruto stories about preteens falling in lurve, ick).

Characters: I'm liking your Sakura. She's smart, but instead of just having her Know Things, you actually show her stopping to think and analyze the situation. She also seems to WANT to be a ninja, which is something canon!Sakura kind of lacked. She's willing to do the work, even the parts she doesn't like, and she isn't afraid to get down and dirty. I like that she's interested in seals; most fics give that area of expertise to Naruto, even though it seems much more in line with Sakura's characterization. I really like that she's actively thinking about what kind of ninja she wants to be (with Kakashi's help), but isn't committing to a specialty until she gets some real experience.

Izanami is a bitch, of course, but she's supposed to be . She isn't whiny, though, which is good. Naruto is still the happy-go-lucky guy, but with an added dose of brains, thanks to Izanami I suspect. They're an interesting duo, and I like that you had Sakura as the odd one out during the bell test.

Kakashi is awesome! He's got the good bits of canon!Kakashi (the lessons about looking underneath the underneath, the slight creepiness, the sense of humor) without the bad bits (being a pretty useless sensei who never teaches the kids any practical skills). I feel like Kakashi and Sakura are going to have an interesting dynamic here; he isn't going to go easy on her because she's a girl or because she has low chakra reserves, he's going to push her to use what she's got (her brains, her control, her surprising ruthless (that bell test, tho)) to be a damn good ninja. I can't wait to see what sort of hijinks they get up to.

As far as the overall plot, this is still just the beginning. I'm curious to see how closely you stick to canon, and how the difference between your 'verse and the canon 'verse influence the plot. That comment in your profile about ANBU not being a joke is giving me anticipatory tingles.

Overall, this is great, and I'm looking forward to more! I'm also interested in being a beta reader, but I'll send you a PM about that.

Hooray for heightened competence. All else being equal, incompetence is about 10 times less fun to watch.

That was one heck of fight scene, but you wrote it well, and got several good bits of characterization in. I especially liked Seeing Sakura think things through, and seeing Naruto's bond with the others. Sasuke and Naruto are built up like good friends in canon, but it never comes across as well as it did in the scene at the end of this chapter. I also must say that the swerve Kakashi pulled was genuinely surprising. I felt a twinge of worry for your heroes, which is more than most fiction gives me.

You're story is really great already. I really enjoy your take on the genin origin! And I also like reading about Sakura's growth. I do hope you'll incorporate med nin into her repertoire. I can't wait until the next chapter!

Stephen here, I reviewed the last chapter as well. Amazing twists to the story there, very intense, love it, etc, etc :D

wow, that was a nice into.
I know its a good storie when i care about the charcters, and they feel real to me.
Definitly going to follow this one

I really am enjoying the story so far! One minor typo though, in chapter 4 Sakura sees a glint in Kakashi's eyes. It should be eye instead.

Amazing so far! Love the writing style, the little twists you've put on the characters, and the quotations and excerpts! Can't wait to read on!

i know nothing about anime, nothing about ninjas, and nothing about the world of Naruto et al. nevertheless i am captivated by the story so far. there is a good balance of action to exposition, at least for a noob like me. I'm looking forward to the next update!

Liking it so far, looking forwards to more! :)

I'm glad you switched Sasuke to female, it's a nice change of pace, as are several of your other changes (such as seeing Naruto and Izanami being friends and stuff instead of bog-standard rivals)

First, I would like to congratulate you on writing the fifth entry on my list of fanfic that's better than canon.

The words you use to tell your story are pleasing to read. The story you tell is interesting, and presented in an elegant fashion. You push the universe in a novel and interesting way. I've thought about how the chakra rules can work with physics and look forward to your exploration.

(And, even though you retconned the fuck out of the trio, I want to read about the characters you're writing about more than their canon counterparts.)

So, with all my complementy stuff out of the way, time for a bit of constructive criticism: GET YOURSELF A BETA. Your writing already defies Sturgeon's law, but even over a casual reading, I noticed a few technical errors that are the only thing keeping this from transcending to HPMOR quality.

(Off the top of my head: you dropped a word here: "He'd told us to meet him here at one o'clock [when] we were done helping the Regulars". In chapter 3, it's antiseptic, not anti-septic. You'd benefit from a second pair of eyes, although your own proofing is better than 90% of everything else.)

And thank you for writing!

Ambitious premise and target goal, and the writing so far seems promising, so overall a good first impression allowing me a measure of cautious optimism that this'll achieve that ambition.

Despite the AU elements, it seems to retain canon flavor. Of course it's much too early to judge properly, so until then I'll be following.

This is awesome! I don't know a thing about Naruto, but HPMOR recommended me here and I'm loving it so far!

A really great read so far, I look forward to the next update. :D