|Reviews for Mind War|
| Guest chapter 5 . 2/8/2013
harry so hard to kill damn it
| Lollypops101 chapter 38 . 4/9/2012
Wow! i am impressed! i often wondered how you were keeping everything straight, with all of the different relationships and plot lines, but you once again defied all of my doubts. amazing story! i can't wait to read the rest!
| J.Hendricks chapter 38 . 3/16/2012
Loved this and your first story but I found Malfoy as main villain a weak point and at times when a character died u kinda overdid the cliche of if u take an I for an I the villain wins. But overall great stories
| MrD1 chapter 38 . 10/13/2011
I used to read fanfiction quite a bit a few years ago, and believing I had exhausted all good stories that fit my liking, I stopped. However, EaL made me realize that there are still some good stories out there. You are a very talented writer, and though I'm sure you don't ever read these reviews anymore since it is over 5-6 years since the last update, I would like to feel that you see this. The story is great, but there is one thing that nagged at me. The angst was tough, and it read more like a soap than an adventure story. I understand you wanted it to seem real, but some plot devices came out of nowhere and left me with a "Where the hell did that come from?" moment. Especially Holly, I didn't notice any hints before her arrival and normally I pick up on that. Other than the random "insert random plot line to advance my story" moments, I really enjoyed this story.
| wizmage chapter 38 . 1/18/2011
This is great.
| Reader beware chapter 27 . 12/17/2010
Though this is listed as adventure, there is so much angst and romance that it could make your head spin. Its actually a delightful read if you just pretend that harry and ginny are together and skip all the angsty bullshit filler chapters in the middle.
| becklenay chapter 38 . 4/11/2010
I do not normally review (a bit of a lurker, lol), but I had to tell you that you have done an admiral job of keeping the characters 'in canon' - despite writing an AU. This is almost to the level of Anne Walsh (that was a complement, :) )
I really HATE when an author "uses" the character's names/backgrounds just to create something that goes against everything JK wrote.
I plan on reading your next installment, and will review again if it is at this level.
| magdilen chapter 38 . 11/21/2009
Great job. That was fun.
I noticed the third part of your trilogy is rated M. I generally don't read M rated stories, but I would like to read this one. Could you tell me what the rating is for (sex, violence, language, whatever)?
| jonayla chapter 38 . 10/24/2009
Great story! loved it really! I think I liked this story better then EoL don't really know why just a feeling (A) For the rest I don't really have much to say, I just can't wait for the sequel!
| FirePhoenix86 chapter 38 . 3/1/2009
I must say i really liked your story. I liked it a lot the first time around, and my feelings about it only increased reading it again.
I think their may have been a few too many characters, it was hard to remember all of them and i eventually made a hard copy list with a description and a few notes about the minor characters like Sharif, and Serafino and such. It got a tiny bit confusing during battles and missions where the reader is trying to remember who the person is, what their part of the mission/battle is, and anything about them. It's really the only big flaw i could think of. a few small ones would be too many mini-subplots, but again, like the many characters, those things are sometimes necessary. I can't see a way you could have written it without a lot of characters and many characters usually means many subplots.
I love how you dragged out Ginny and Harry's problems for so long. Many of the fics I've read they argue and make up within a few chapters. which in a situation like Holly showing up, that kind of thing doesn't resolve itself that quickly. There's so much depth and emotion in your writing, it's so multi-dimensional. another thing i liked is that overall it was a happy ending, but not perfect. Wormtail was still walking about, and the Japanese subplot was still available. You tied up all the loose ends i can think of other than those two.
I can't remember reading the last two stories you wrote so I'm off to read those as well. But i would like to recommend a story for you, it's called Harry Potter and the Antiquity Link by semprini. I found it on / authors / semprini / Just take out the spaces and change the dot's to periods. It super long like yours, but its so amazing and multifaceted I think you'd like it after reading your writing.
| FirePhoenix86 chapter 27 . 3/1/2009
"It sounds like a story written by a twisted writer who borrowed the plot and central characters from a talented and successful one and embellished it beyond recognition."
"I hope I'm one of the central characters…" Ron muttered."
-i loved this it made me chuckle very much...
| FirePhoenix86 chapter 15 . 2/27/2009
well, this is the best thing for me when i'm sick is to enjoy a good story. My coughing doesn't interupt the sound since there is none, and i never have to pause to go blow my nose! lol, lov ethe story!
| agent moriel chapter 38 . 1/4/2009
Wow - I love your writing. You had me hooked from the beginning of EaL! I really don't have much criticism to offer, except, as you mentioned in your author's note, not seeing much of some characters (like Padma), later on. I don't think there are too many characters; although I was a bit overwhelmed by the numbers at first, you use them enough so that it's not too confusing later on. Thanks for such an enjoyable series, and I can't wait to start reading the next one!
| esad chapter 38 . 9/8/2008
Very good fic!
Thanks for writing, it was a pleasure to read
| Modulus chapter 38 . 8/6/2008
Very good story... really liked Max's character, reminds me of Harry from the fic "Learning to Breathe". Nice AU. All in all a good job... the only minor irritant was the part where Matrix just popped out of the blue. I'm a matrix fan myself, but somehow found it to be quite corny and annoying.