Reviews for Unpaid Debts
lovely-whisper chapter 15 . 12/2/2005
Absolutely fabolous! Just like the first part, this is an amazing story and could be turned into a movie without any trouble!
KuRua chapter 4 . 9/28/2004
good evening, spades.

I just read your story, and I found it actually good.

however, I found some mistakes in the dialogue in Italian...you see, i am from Genoa,in north-west of Italy..if you don't mind, I'd like to correct it..

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"Allora, è un tuo collega oppure il tuo amante?"

"Veramente nessuno dei due. In realtà, sono pronta a fargli veramente male..."

"Sessualmente?"

"Non credo...Piuttosto, fargli desiderare di non avermi mai incontrata"

"Com'è a letto?"

"Non lo so. E tu non hai bisogno di saperlo al posto mio"

"Peccato. non mi sarebbe dispiaciuto.."

"Non ne avevo dubbi"

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Bye bye. Good story.
ivorybrowneyes chapter 15 . 12/23/2002
yay! you shouted out to me. lol. A wonderful way to end a wonderful story! I'm working on chapter 4 of mine right now...I'm getting wrapped up in it too! I like the sentence "They knew that the sex was great, they found that out once Xander's shoulder was up to the physical activity". Very very cute!
BlueEyedGemini chapter 15 . 12/23/2002
I hate that it's over. I love this. I cant wait for the next story. I love your writing. your very talented. You make it so exciting. Update with you new fic soon. This story kicked ass.

Cindy
Natasha chapter 14 . 12/22/2002
ahhhhhh! amazing once again, but I'm increadibly sad and disapointed that this story is comming to an end:( boo-urns! but of course, I can't wait for the next installment of the trilogy! you and your friend ivorybrowneyes are great authors, and I'm glad you exchange ideas because it makes both of your stories unbelievably interesting!so good luck and merry christmas!

Tasha
BlueEyedGemini chapter 14 . 12/22/2002
woooo that was good. It sux that theres only one chapter left but I cant wait till the third story. Update soon. I love it.

Cindy
ivorybrowneyes chapter 14 . 12/22/2002
yay there's a sequel! Actually that chapter kicked more ass than you know! lol. That was awesome gurl! So let's get on the next one!
ivorybrowneyes chapter 13 . 12/19/2002
You better have not just killed her! lol. You can't leave me hanging like this!
BlueEyedGemini chapter 13 . 12/19/2002
Great chapter/ I love this story. It's so full of action and it's so well written that you feel like your actualy watching it cuz it's so descriptive you can picture everything. Keep em coming.

Cindy
Guest chapter 12 . 12/15/2002
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great story so far. i hope you continue it with the triliogy1

keep up the good job
Lexxiss chapter 12 . 12/14/2002
Great chapter, even though you didn't kill off Xander *grins* I want to know if Samine makes it to safe ground, or if Xander still has a chance of getting seriously hurt by Enclave...HURRY!

Lexxi
ivorybrowneyes chapter 12 . 12/14/2002
aww that little confession was cute! actually it was very nice to come back from my friend's house and have 2 chapters to read! I haven't gotten any more work done on my story. I might just take it off because I only have the one review...I don't know. oh well. anyways, very very nice addition!
BlueEyedGemini chapter 12 . 12/14/2002
omg the finally admitted it. Their in love. YAY!lol. Very excitin chapter. Cant wait to read more.

Cindy
Lexxiss chapter 11 . 12/13/2002
That'd be awesome if you killed Xander off! I mean that'd ruin the whole plot of the xXx story, but you know that'd be the perfect twist to a story like this. You could have him jump in front of the bullet that Enclave shoots at Samine and he could die in her arms as she cries over his body...*sighs* sorry day dreaming, great chapter I'm excited for another one!

Lexxi
Guest chapter 11 . 12/13/2002
holy shit that was good! Update! Update!
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