Reviews for The Maelstrom Hunter
Infernus est in animo chapter 1 . 5/12
Good and all, but i recommend sorti g out the line spacings, they're freaking massive and disjointed
TenWing chapter 29 . 5/11
Great to have you back and a really nice chapter too.
Alternet RedSkys chapter 29 . 5/3
This is a great story. But there is something in the beginning of chapter one show be looked at.

Sorry took a few days to read to this chapter.
Elements1999 chapter 29 . 5/1
ps. I'm pretty sure you killed me... I was laughing so much... oh well *shrugs shoulders* gingers are cursed to walk the earth for all of eternity after they die anyways so its not like it matters anyways *grins* but seriously, great story.
Twilight-Lloyd chapter 3 . 4/27
What Glynda uses as a weapon isn't a wand, it's a riding crop. She looks like she's into the kinky stuff.
The Baz chapter 15 . 4/24
Where did they get all this on such short notice? Whose gonna clean up the mess? How does anyone in that world know what a Mexican stand off is?! WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON HERE!?
Dymian chapter 1 . 4/24
You need to reformat this chapter, they way it is laid out is really distracting from the story, especially when you interrupt a sentence by cutting the end part off and moving it down to the next line.
Guest chapter 25 . 4/24
Cinder is 18 its impossible for her to be the mother of emerald and mercury seeing as they 17
Guest chapter 24 . 4/24
Your rushing the naruto story and naruto never would of been caught like that and Obito doesn't know fuinjutsuno one in akatsuki does so they wouldn't be able to imprison naruto using it
Guest chapter 22 . 4/24
Cinder isn't skilled enough to capture naruto at best she's onlya bit better then team rwby combined and at worst only a bit better then ruby either way naruto is dozens of times better than her so she wouldn't be able to take Jim Alive
Guest chapter 15 . 4/24
Give naruto the uzumaki chakra chains
bananafanafohana chapter 12 . 4/24
You shouldn't of killed jaraiya off he was barely in the story at all which means he wasn't a main character which means his death is pointless to the story
Guest chapter 11 . 4/24
Wood can't be used as a shield against lava lava would burn through wood in a second or 2 and that's with out it being focused shot out in projectile form like roshi did it would go through wood like a bullet being shot through a piece of paper
Guest chapter 11 . 4/24
Yamanaka techniques don't work on jinchiruki and shikamaru would never attack unless attacked first he's to lazy to take initiative and while they may outnumber them yamato and asuma would never be so foolish as to attack a single jinchiruki yet alone 3 unless there was absolutely no other choice and since they are looking for naruto to bring him home not to kill they wouldn't put there team at risk attacking 3 jinchiruki and shikamarus shadow techniques means for him to successfully restrain opponents he needs to be at least their equal in how much chakra they all have shikamaru doesn't have the chakra to hold 3 jinchiruki for longer than about 5 seconds and since it would be seen as an attack Han fu and roshi would attack and another thing tsunade would never send 11 shinobi to track one shinobi down jinchiruki or not with out a real good reason and a damned important emergency at best shed send a team consisting of 4 jonin level shinobi and only send more if the team sent request for backup and had a damn good reason for it
MasyerDisaster chapter 10 . 4/24
Your naruto is a naive whiny foolish bitch he needs to grow up and grow up fast
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