then update!

"i saw red" really my nga

Hi. So, I know you said you wouldn’t discontinue the story, but it’s been a decade. Literally.

Another example of you over-embellishing the Hunt's hatred towards men: Thalia literally has a blood-related baby brother alive. Yet she calls Percy "the only decent male on Earth". Like damn, guess Thalia just thinks Jason is scum now.

There are some great parts to this story. I especially liked Percy's reaction towards Poseidon forbidding him to go to the Underworld. However, the portrayal of the Hunt is such a big detractor for this story, especially since this is a Hunt/Artemis/Pertemis focused story.

Sigh...

For some reason, people love writing about this trope (betrayed - guardian - tortured - apologizes - forgiveness - pertemis). I'm not going to bash on this trope anymore, everyone can write what they want to write.

But could you at least make it somewhat believable, at least a little bit? Just a teeny, tiny bit?

Like EVEN if we disregard EVERYTHING that canon Percy does for Artemis and Olympus in general (which is a fucking lot btw), just in this story, we have the following events:

1) Thalia losing her leg. Percy literally REGROWS Thalia's leg, allowing her to stay in the Hunt. The Hunters LITERALLY WATCH as he does it. But somehow that equates to being 'useless' literally on the same day by the same Huntresses that watched him regrow her leg. My guy/gal/dear author, this is just not a believable human interaction, by any stretch of imagination! Especially when they feel IMMEDIATE guilt later on when Artemis scolds them with like 2 sentences.

2) A goddess that's been alive for over 2500 years old is somehow for the first time seeing and being shocked that a brother would protect his sister from bullies? She's never seen a father work overtime for wages for his daughter before in 2500 years? What is she the goddess of, avoiding humanity?

When you make things too ridiculous for the sake for drama, you turn your story into a crack-fic. And crack-fics without the intentional humor are just not it.

I'm pretty late, but this has got to be one of the best fanfics I've ever read. Not needlessly inappropriate, unlike some fan fictions, and it really kept me hooked the whole way through, I am excited to see what happens next!

THIS IS LITERALLY SO AMAZING, MY FRIEND INTRODUCES THIS TO ME AND NOW I LOVE THIS SO MUCH! I look forward to the next chapter!

She's always so quick to put her hands on Percy. Dude has terrible taste in women.

UPDATED PLS

UPDATE PLS

I seriously need to stop reading this type of fan fiction as it makes me hate Annabeth so much. But awesome writes like you make it too good or resist! Dam your amazing talents! (Not being meant btw)

MAKE MMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

isnt it on wattpad?

Best ever start that I have ever read

Its been so long...