Reviews for The Serpent Sorcerer |
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![]() ![]() ![]() excellent work good job very well done looking forward to the next chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() like how much kabuto plans ahead. still think its hilarious how he talks down to the konoha shinobi |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hahahaha very entertaining chapter, when will we see more of Kabutos other girls?Tnx for the update. |
![]() ![]() ![]() thank you for sharing another fantastic chapter as well as all the effort you put in to this please continue to update as life allows |
![]() ![]() good chapter |
![]() ![]() good chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice chapter tnx for the update. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It might be Naruto standard silliness to explain the ins and outs of awesome techniques to your enemies during a fight, thus allowing them to counter it then or later on, but why on Earth would Kabuto do that for the killing curse? I thought he was smarter than that! He even did it with the rest of Akatsuki listening in! I love the fact that you had Kabuto take both Deidara and Sasori’s body so that he can claim the bounties on them…and that he also took their DNA to improve himself even further or learn about their unique abilities. I’m telling you, a lot of authors would have entirely forgotten about that angle. Hopefully Kabuto has time to both gather whatever ninja equipment and supplies prior to leaving for the wizarding world, and has time to convert all his ryo notes to gold and gems. So the situation with the ladies has been resolved and an agreement worked out. That’s good. Very decent lemon. Looking forward to more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The beginning of this chapter needs work. You started off most of the sentences with “Kabuto” and it came off bad. The chapter as a whole needed some TLC, I think, it had a ton of errors. I’m not seeing the benefit of putting in the hand signs before the various jutsu. I don’t think it adds much to the chapter. Wandlessly performing the killing curse is quite the feat. That should be handy in the future. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome chapter as always..although you kinda changed yami to yang without warning and it was quite confusing for a while also yami rolls of the tongue a lot better than yang so i hope you reconsider the change in name |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really enjoying the story. I like that you've taken a somewhat unusual bloodline (swift release) and are developing it, rather than giving Kabuto every-single-bloodline-for-the-win!, especially when those bloodlines aren't used, like in some other stories. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excelent chapter liked how the fight went and the girl ended charing Kabuto curious how the meeting at the bridge will go |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome lemon. like the scene with the girls agreeing to the harem. wonder whats next on the list for kabuto |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter and lemon |