Por que es mejor que el mundo Shinobi este intacto para poder incprporar lis diferentes personajes y otros conceptos de Naruto para complementar conceptos de como funciona la Narrativa en este Crosdover

Cuando en este capitulo dijeron que Madara destruyo su mundo espero que no se refiera a que destruyo todas las naciones Shinobi

Queria solicitar una propuestaque es incorporar eñ restode los personajesy universo de Naruto de la forma que lo hizo un Crossover llamado Shinobi Justice Vol 1

Interesting start so far.

A bit chaotic, which is likely intentional, also a bit lacking on descriptions and 3xolanations (remember, not all readers will know both parts of the crossover well enough to simply fill in the blanks), but promising.

To your question, likely.
YJ crossovers were all the hype when you wrote it.

Aside from that, and it being a bit too much talking and too little description, it ain't bad so far...

Naruto is being to cocky just cause a helped stop one measly factory that more than likely didn’t actually do anything to help Gotham.

OK, I must once again say that this all feels very. Disjointed.

Probably cause none of the usual discussion from SB/SV is around for background?

And as 8nteresting as some joints as to what is haooening in th bg are, the main plot seems lost somewhere in the middle...

OK, I'm dropping it if it doesn't get less disjointed.

Even as someone who has just rrwatched YJ to the most recent chapters I don't get who is doing what, where and Why...

You need a beta star9AA wsb1#and

Ah, the much aligned time-Jump.

I think rightfully so, as it made all the rest feel totally disjointed for a while, but given they had to realistically let the reach decide to attack, and get there, unavoidable. Siigghh

The fact that they got starro teched not once but twice AND let the reach get the better of them Was the only bad part of the otherwise stellar series.

Oh. And good work. Nice chapter.

Somehow, you managed to make the meaningful end seem totally like a hang on.

You need to work on your flow, your chapters are sometimes great, sometimes good, bit almost always the ends feel like a tacked on serials "And Next Week Wait For x y z..."

Otherwise very well. Done, keep at it!

I for one would like to see more Dr. Roquette...Match, the whole Fiascos background, and what, if at all, Supes is (finally?) doing for his estranged son(s)...

Fuuuudge, did you have to let that line there?

Had a bad day today anyway, and you reminded me of this to boot...

It's not easy to be more realistic than teen titans (LA), where one teamember per season has to die/be overtaken/whatnot to feel dark, and trigon gets taken care of in one episode.

Sorry, but as good as the acting was in parts, the whole was horribly rushed and disjointed. To be expected in today's world of "Noone knows if you get to finish your story arc", but still... Ugh.

The only well done part Was, strangely enough given the source, Wilson amd his sons... Let's say Goodbye?

As for the chapter, also too meandering and disjointed, and especially the genomorphs should know better than to treat raven like this "jut because the future is set in stone", or they could have simply accepted their lot..

Too jumpy, needs more internal smoothness and / or at least clearer separations of what happens where, and how.

More Detail would also be nice.

And a less dumb Naruto. Even in the Original where he's at Forrest Gump Levels for most of the time (until his sage mode counteracts the Chakra poisoning and Kurama gets less contrary) he would never be so dumb NOT to tell his friends things that could come back and haunt them...

Batman in YJ isn't called BatDad for nothing.

He would not act like this to Naruto right after he got back up.

Maybe a longer lecture later, but that? That is how you lose your "subordinates" first you don't help them, then let them go fight your "prime enemy" alone, and after he does better than you, criticize his methods.

Hybris much, Bruce?