Reviews for When Civilizations Meet
DeathRayBob chapter 1 . 12/29/2020
Your Dec 29th 2100 entry contains excessive hyperbole, thereby turning the Apex from a standard-pattern DN into a one-off monster with its own unique weapons. Was this your intention?

Unique warship designs are always a bad idea; which is generally why you won't find them in developed Navies and only rarely in those of smaller Nations that don't have a choice. The Logistical strains alone are damaging, as you must source, store and distribute several unique ranges of spares just for that single hull. Even worse, trying to fit a one-off into existing Fleet doctrine is expensive in resources and man-hours, while typically forcing modifications that reduce current capability in deference to what the new ship can do.

Lastly, in order to have a single vessel of any particular class available for deployment, you typically need multiples of THREE in service. One undergoing refit, the second working-up and the third actually deployed.

With all of that said, the above paragraph can be easily fixed. Simply note that the Apex is a sister-ship of an existing class - or even a modified version thereof. As such, its capabilities, weapons and employment envelope is well known and the ship readily slips into existing maintenance regimes and operational regeneration arrangements. Basically, this is my ship. There are many like it, but this one is mine, kind of thing.
Mikazuki Augus1 chapter 6 . 6/17/2020
oh come on whats with the tf2 bullshit its so over used
Guest chapter 15 . 12/16/2018
Well that sucks it was actually a good story
Heartfire12 chapter 17 . 12/14/2018
Super histoire(même si la fin est asse décevant)
BeepBoop chapter 13 . 10/14/2017
Are all the Spartans in this universe basically super soldiers? Also are you going to awaken the master chief?
BeepBoop chapter 12 . 10/14/2017
What happened to Vahlen, Bradford, and the commander?
BeepBoop chapter 4 . 10/12/2017
Shouldn't Xoom have EMP weapons? Also I feel like complete units would be spec ops people
Guest chapter 17 . 12/11/2016
Stupidity ar its best, suck a 20 foot cock you fucking cunt!
Axcel chapter 15 . 11/30/2016
You made the Reapers deadly enough to defeat the alliance in this fic, so the OP factor doesn't really matter. You already implied with the Library that the Reapers from the games are basically kiddy gloves compared to what comes if those are defeated.
Axcel chapter 11 . 11/30/2016
With humanity's technology, especially MELD, terraforming would be easy. As such, overpopulation is of no concern. Also, the human death rate and birth rate are such that even immortality would not lead to overpopulation of Earth for at least a couple centuries. That isn't even taking into account birth-control methods such as number of children restrictions. Plus, more people living means more people fighting the Reapers in some capacity.
Axcel chapter 6 . 11/30/2016
Actually, only those lives on the science ships were post to misunderstanding. Everyone else was killed due to Turian greed and arrogance.
Axcel chapter 4 . 11/30/2016
Why do writers frequently make some sort of primarch council? Isn't there only one primarch? Their society follows a military chain of command rules by one person.
Axcel chapter 1 . 11/29/2016
Ignore TheLurkerBelow. What he said is either nonsensical (like being shot by plasma one-shotting the target being "overpowered"), contradicted by canon or science, or is never mentioned in either game's canon in the first place. He also likes to exaggerate and does not realize that a dreadnaught's gun, however powerful, is a precision weapon quite useless for true bombardment.
yiggdrasill chapter 17 . 4/12/2016
so...i jump to the latest chapter to get a feel of where this is going and see the rewrite notice. will jump over to that one and see how its going
yiggdrasill chapter 7 . 4/12/2016
your writting style needs work (im not sure what to call it, it doesnt 'flow' well? doesnt feel like a conversation?) but your ideas are rather original (to me, ive never seen the turian become a client state before or an outright offer to the krogan and quarian) at this point im really wondering what the citadel races are going to do now, especially the volus. one other thing, sonic based weaponry would have more uses then pure navel combat (though no space/void uses) like a sniper rifle with no sound (since its all focused on the target) or other things to give away location. maybe a clean, controled breacking charge. try to REALLY think about how a tech could be applied, like you did with the gene mods. lastly, its good to see humanity not depicted as a bunch of xenophobic madmen, they live alongside mutons, ethereals and more. it just wouldnt have been realistic, theyre wary to be sure (who wouldnt be after three wars) but still reasonable. enjoying this so far
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