Reviews for No Game No Life: The Twins of Blank
Guest chapter 5 . 3/20
Guest chapter 1 . 3/18
I like it this so far. I think you should continue! Best of luck
Princess630 chapter 5 . 10/9/2016
katmar1994 chapter 1 . 3/16/2016
I love it already! I can't wait to read more!
Catacus chapter 5 . 1/27/2016
Damn this is awesome i really like it! :D
Child-of-Strength chapter 5 . 1/10/2016
Please update, I would like to see how Shun will react to the Flugel. I have several questions towards Shun's intelligence. Has Shun always have a large capacity of knowledge? Is Shun what you call a genius? Does Shun have larger capabilities than Shiro and Sora?
Kaykay221335 chapter 5 . 12/23/2015
Update plz!
Guest chapter 5 . 8/6/2015
Update. Please?
SilverMidnightWolf chapter 1 . 7/31/2015
If I had to rate this story I would give it a 2 out of 5. While the concept is great, your OC is not really all that original. All you did was add a character and shove some lines while stealing some of Sora's and Shiro's lines. There was no change other than 2 extra blanks and a few small moments. From what I've read this seems more like a self insert of yourself, but made to make you seem perfect. I'm sorry, but I'm just being honest. Give the character more flaw, give more detail, change up the pace instead of completly following the main plot, don't use lines that are there already; make your own, and pleas try to make your chacter as original as possible. Shun's an OC for a reason. I hope you improve in the future.
Adam Arashi chapter 1 . 5/6/2015
oh my god this is written so well! You should make more!
Cyberweasel89 chapter 1 . 2/13/2015
Hmmmm... Interesting. I admit, Shun's name and kanji doesn't really fit in with Blank's naming theme, nor does she fit in with the two's "reprenting the two halves of the brain" thing. It's too early to tell if Shun is a worthy addition, but I'll keep reading. You have a nice writing style, and No Game No Life needs more love.

Also, judging from what Shiro said, is Shun about as buxom as most of the other female characters in the series? Also, Sora said Shun "couldn't answer the door like that"... Like what?
Justin k chapter 5 . 1/9/2015
ethan.lukkar chapter 5 . 12/30/2014
Magnificent chapter can't wait for more please update soon.
Starlight Whisper chapter 1 . 12/5/2014
IcyAutumnFlame summed my thoughts up exactly. Shun is far too perfect, and she keeps taking up some of my favorite lines from Sora and Shiro. Also, in her character profile, you said that Shun can't speak in front of large crowds. However, in one of the chapters she spoke with ease, and I think that you should either a) make this a real flaw, or b) think of multiple other flaws because no one is perfect.

Also, you stated that you're 18. I'm not in high school yet, and my writing skills are either at or above yours. From an 18-year-old, I'd expect an engaging plot, strong character development, and a dash of creativity. (Check out Poisoned Scarlet if you'd like an example.) Unfortunately, I saw none of this in your piece. You should add more description because too much dialoge makes a story bland.

I believe you really do have potential as an author if you'd make your OCs more believable. Shun seems to be the result of either a self-insert or your imagination running away with you. I don't mean to be harsh, this is just my opinion and I believe that a healthy dose of criticism helps people get a better on their strengths and weaknesses as an author. (Basically why I welcome criticism on my work, as long as people took the time to read my story.)
AutumnLakes chapter 1 . 12/5/2014
Hi. I'm sorry but I will not follow or favorite your story. You are a great writer in grammar and way of using words, but you content is no good. It sticks too close to canon events. Also if you are going to add a OC, don't make them Mary-Sue. Shun is too perfect. She is what Sora and Shiro would be if they were one person. It just destroys any liking I have to this story. I feel that if you wanted her to have mixed traits of the two, you should have had them more mediocre than the other two. She should have at least some flaws. You even said that she did Sora and Shiro's specialties better than them. Personally I think that if you are 18 you should produce better work. Your work should be far better than mine because of the difference of our learning experience but I am questioning that. This is NOT a flame. This is strictly my opinon and Blaze's. I hope you can learn from this review. -IcyAutumnFlame & Blaze of Madness
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