Really enjoyed your two stories. The Dumbledore/Shin dynamic was hilarious. Your depiction of Lestrade, Robert and Mrs. Jack was great. Thank you for sharing your writing with us.

Only one older brother?

Your author notes for this chapter were so happy about how you wrote the scenes of Lestrade in the bank. I am sorry to have to state this, but you just messed up with those scenes. You plot holed your previous plot hole error.

A while back in a different chapter, I believe in the prequel story, you wrote HP proving that wand usage by non-owners of the wand was difficult to do even easy spells, and made mention of Harry witnessing fellow students testing it to those results.

Yet now you have Lestrade using the wand of someone else. He was not even blood related to the wand's original owner. Yes they were married, but canonically that is virtually the same as a complete stranger's wand. Even Nelville as a son was not a good match for his father's wand due to his similarities with his mother. Ollivander's intro speech to Harry specifically mentioned how different his parents' wands were, and we were told during the storyline that James was best at Transfiguration while Lily was best at Charms and perhaps Potions. So now you having Lestrade using his dead wife's wand, which he only carries around as a memento and never uses, to release the dragon like you did the very first time he uses the wand was a SERIOUS blundererrorplot hole.

Stayed up late multiple nights to read your works and the subject your writing style kept me thoroughly entertained.
Thank you.

Touching. Ty.

Thank you for sharing this

Always fell bad when Amelia dies

I enjoyed your story.
I don't see why you rushed the love trio. Don't see it happening. Definitely odd since there is no background to it.
Why would Mycroft hate Harry? That also seemed strange, and we don't know if he did or not. Not that Mycroft isn't scary or incapable of hate, but why did he order Harry out? He knew that things might go sideways.

But sherlock can't die!

Aahh this was so fun to read. I binged it hard, and now my sleep schedule is all screwed up haha.

Thank you for sharing your story!

I must agree, l was singing that song in my head almost the entire chapter.

So.

First thing, I'll only acknowledge the sentence of "...who stood staring down at his enemy's shell" as the end of this fanfiction. After that is just... really disappointing. I'm sorry.

The other comment is right. I've been so invested in this story. Hell, put it in my Top 10 fave HP fanfictions but the ending literally got me... really disappointed. For an epic story (regardless fanfiction) that had poured so much passion into it, then reaching to the 2nd book, I started to see it was an up-and-down rollercoaster ride. Idk why but I felt you might have been struggling with the other chapters and just rolled with it. It's understandable anyway, but dang... the ending just really felt lackluster.I want to say I love you or I hate you if there was an alternate ending but I just felt... I was left hanging.

Anyway, that's my review after reading 'till the end. I love book 1, there's no question to it. Book 2 was just... messy sort-of-way.

What a weird clusterfuck for a finale.

Followed by the rushed wrap up, this is an unsatisfying end to such a gigantic story. It needed more space but I'm assuming you were in a hurry to just get it over with after this many hundreds of thousands of words, author. You came all the way but tripped up right at the finish line. A shame, but the massive effort you spent to get here isn't a waste, you made a thoroughly serviceable crossover fanfiction. Plus the way you did the thing with the thingy was really good, so it's not a disappointing ending.

Overall, ASIM is a really big pile of rough with many a diamond sparkling in it. Your overall story would've been FAR stronger if this "sequel" didn't exist at all (it had a distinctly higher rough to diamond rate before) and finished off Voldy at the end of your previous fanfiction. You wouldn't have commited a terrible sin against mathematics by calling this a sequel to something five times its size too.

6,5/10

It didn't really work out when Rowling took the whimsical children's fairytale world established in the earlier HP books and attempted to make it into some sort of high stakes thriller aimed at adult(ish)s, it doesn't really work out when you do it here. The disjointment is too severe. Sure, Tolkien manages it pretty well from Hobbit to LotR (still couldn't exactly nail it), but not every writer can pull off what old Prof could.

So your big flaw in this fanfiction is to hew too close to the original books, which are flawed themselves. The exact details of plot and characters don't matter that much, it's a matter of tone and vibe.

Aunt Harry stuff was bullshit. Nobody should've been this blase about obliviating her. Accustoming Harry to bombs is nonsense. Harriet not stopping the exercise when inexplicably strange things start happening is silly.

Previous one was the first outright bad chapter you wrote, author. I assumed it might amount to something good this chapter but that didn't happen. It's still bullshit and now you have 1.5 really bad chapters in your record.