Reviews for A Brother |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I love your story brother, I really loved it, although I would have liked to read what happened after the final battle, as an epilogue chapter. Leaving that aside, I want to thank you for the good times I spent reading "The Story of a Brother." Kind regards Nagato-Senju. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your story is really good but you make the paragraphs to long sometimes. |
![]() ![]() ![]() bastard. broke her heart. but I get it |
![]() ![]() ![]() Uhh actually a lot of people know about hogoromo’s brother, his name is hamura, there was a whole feature length film about him and his descendants on the moon. Don’t know if you’ve ever seen it, it’s called Naruto the last. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Now its getting down hill, sure you want to get the story along, but realy? |
![]() ![]() ![]() If possible please provide a epilogue, regardless I love the story and the ingenuity of this story moved me, the various chakra elements you used thought were quite enjoyable to read . Keep up the good work ! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Overall I loved the fic, easily in my top 15. But there were a lot of weird parts. Naruto constantly has power fluctuations where sometimes he's god while other times he's weaker than everyone else (and I'm not talking about his civilian guise, but as the elemental sage). The starting chapters were very slow while last few chapters were incredibly rushed. Some of the drama was very forced and was angsty in many ways just for the sake of having it. But despite all that, I felt way more immersed in this story than most fics and really enjoyed it. Kinda hard for me to explain why considering that I listed a lot of negatives, but I think you did a very good job overall. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't see the point in renaming Hanabi |
![]() ![]() ![]() Everything could've been avoided if Naruto had just spent his time finding all of the bijuu, instead of becoming some kind of tool for Konoha. Extracting the tailed beasts would kill the host, yes, but why does he have to care? He's been alive for thousands of years, he had seen kingdoms and empires fall, his only family remaining being the tailed beasts, and you tell me he won't extract the tailed beasts from their hosts because the hosts would die? That's some bullshit. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Might Dai's secret origin |
![]() ![]() No offense but this was kinda boring, it took forever to get onto the plot and even than it was more or less only boring dialog. It's all pretty far away from what I would discribe as Adventure. Its feels more like a basic scrip that still lacks nearly all action or real scenes. The worst part is how little the Naruto is taking action in the world or really does anything of great impact, cause in the end it all goes down very near to canon. And with the interesting interactions laking, there is little of the story left |
![]() ![]() I'm gonna have nightmares because of that ending, but I'n really enjoying everything else. It's just... *shudder* green... spandex... youth... *shudder* |
![]() ![]() Definitely think you should've actually got onto the plot by now... |
![]() ![]() ![]() O god my eyes |
![]() ![]() ![]() aneh |