Rian! Rian! Hah, I guessed it, hehe.

It was gloomy, yes, but let me tell you, it's much better and certainly more realistic than some other 'happy' stories I've read (and written, lol).

How do you write angst so well? It just amazing, the way you use fragments and words to portray it.

"She would never return to *their* world."

Very eerie. Will you write more fics about Rian? You seem to have a strong grasp of her character, even with this story. And she's such a neglected character.

It must be too long since I read the Silm. I don't remember Rian (got the name from your other reviews here). I couldn't quite understand this fic. Whose child was it? The Elf's? Rian's? Very confusing. And there were typos and awkward grammar too. It hard to get which meaning you were going for in places:

For example:

Then, he had created too many different kinds of beings

too many or also many?

If the story were clearer, I might have enjoyed it more.

Whoa, how did I miss this?

Chilling. And you chose the perfect character- at least, your interpretation of her character. Reading her "fairy tale" made my stomach tie up in knots. The line about cherishing wives is particularly poignant. Sad that even in near-madness she could find small comfort, and then only for a short time.

Maybe you'll write more about Rian? Her last night with Huor? Please?

Impressive writing.

Hmm, i missed this, somehow. What to say? Yes, it's very depressing. Then again, not all fairy tales must be happy. Poor Rian...

Nice job!

- Ellipsis

p.s. forgot to say I'll link this!

Gloomy indeed... but such is life, especially in the Silmarillion, and an ideal world is, indeed, a fairy tale. Poor Rian. Poor world.

Can't log in for some reason. Ah, well...

Beautifully written little piece. You don't have to write long stories in order to be good, you know. I admire your ability to create such a dense atmosphere with so few words.

Well, well... someone's been listening to the whispers of Morgoth for far too long. It's certainly a sad fairy tale, but then, not all fairy tales have a happy ending. Well, still have some tears left does she? At least it's some way to release the feelings inside. You do a decent job of portraying her madness and her desperation in talking to her baby. I'm fine with unhappy birthday stories. Thanks. :)

Yes, it's gloomy - but it's beautiful gloomy and good gloomy, and I enjoyed it.

Correct, I have no idea who it is...

but...

*sobs* that was so *sad*! I've always considered the Silmarillion one of the most tragic tales there is, and that fairy tale enhanced it... and they all lived happily ever after... but they *didn't*...

*breaks down crying uncontrollably*

Er, sorry... I don't appear to be very coherent at the moment. It's a good fic, it's a very good fic *goes off to cry*

I know, I know! 'Tis Rian, isn't it? _

Well. Very beautiful story. Don't put yourself down like that. (maybe I shouldn't be talking here) One thing that struck me greatly was the sentence the woman inserted in her story: "and all cherished their wives as the most precious gift of their life" which really seems out of place, but almost immediately gives the clue as to who the character is. I also love the way she's pretending to talk to her child, but really to herself; it is not the baby she's trying to soothe, but her own sorrow she would calm.

And, err... I'm not really sure what is hidden behind the words that the mightiest of Elves gladly gave his stones to embellish Melkor's crown, but if I do indeed understand well, then the meaning makes me shudder to no end...

Anyways. Beautiful and sad. Just like the true story is.

*shivers* Yes it's short, but you've set the scene so well and made it eerie, not helped by the fact it's dark and cold outside my window, not 10 cm from me..