Reviews for H2o:Just Add Twins
fishboy99 chapter 4 . 6/18/2014
This is a really good story i cant wait to see what happens next
fishboy99 chapter 1 . 6/18/2014
I think the concept behind your story is a really good idea the only thing i might would suggest working on is the format that you use to write it. Aside form that i think this has the potential to be an excellent story
delovlies chapter 1 . 6/6/2014
Hey! I've got some advice if you want it. This sounds like a cool story, but format is off. First, remember that you can add chapters separately and not mash them all together. This is a good idea, but it's not executed well. You could benefit from paying attention to punctuation and commas. Longer chapters would be great, it it would be really nice not to have POV switch a lot. If you want a multi-POV, try to write in third person, or pick a person and stick with it for the whole chapter. Also, instead of *Hangs up phone* try using actual sentences to write. Like, "Val hung up the phone" and using "speech" said Vik instead of a colon. Hope some of this helps improve your writing! Plus, I'm a twin, so if you have questions about twins, ask away! Happy writing :)