Reviews for Better Safe |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome job. Love it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the way Grant Ward moves from total paranoia to enjoyment of the bolt-hole, and with or without my editorial help (and thanks for the acknowledgement :) ) you got there very convincingly. Yes, he's got a lot of issues to work through - who wouldn't, after dealing with frickin' Garrett? They're not going to disappear overnight because he's working with warmer people; it's only persistence and constant evidence of good-intentions that is going to thaw him, and that's just what you've shown here. You've got a really nice insight into Ward's mind, and you've shown it with beautifully descriptive passages in places which are entirely original. It's a wonderful wrap-around ending that works. Not mushy, but real. And all you guys out there who have followed and favourited but not said a word on the review board by way of **aCTIVE ENCOURGEMENT - please do!? Please? Just a couple of lines about what you liked makes a world of difference to the writer. It's reviews and positive feedback that keep 'favourite' authors writing. ok - lecture over, lol. Keep writing, Biichi Gi... tig xxxxx ** active encouragement was meant to be capitalised throughout, but apparently, capital a won't play ball on my bluetooth keyboard... |
![]() ![]() ![]() An excellent ending to an excellent story, you capture ward's relationships to each of the team members in way that was both believable and extremely well done. I really did enjoy reading this story and i look forward to more, whether it be a sequel to this wonderful story, or something completely different either way thanks for the amazing story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's really nice to see it all together, like this :) Reading it in one go gave me the chance to pick out favourite bits, like Skye's toddler approach to sharing (nicking things), Fitz's jocularity and telling him he's too pretty, lol, Coulson's amused oversight of the games, and Jemma's coralling attempts. I did enjoy how they kind of turned into kids during that game. And how Ward stayed on top of things despite being weak from blood loss. Really nice bit of insight with Coulson, reflecting on Ward's mental improvement. It's true, it's taking a while, but Ward's learning that he doesn't have to be a loner now, just because he's always had to be a loner before. great chapter! tig xxx |
![]() ![]() ![]() Another great chapter. I always love some good fitzward bonding, the team game night was very entertaining. I look forward to the next chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Glad to see you are back! This chapter was very good, you write the character of ward very well, and i loved Simmons in this chapter you capture her very mother-like nature very well! Looking forward to the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's a nice balance of him trying to behave and be the good soldier, and follow his conditioning to not lean on anyone for any reason. Ever. Even when that pretty much leads to him dropping like a stone because he's not ready to get up. Hard bed indeed... it still tickles me slightly that it took him forever to work out that the button was on the claw and had to have it pointed out to him in the end... the notion of attaching him to a monitor so that he could be stubborn in safety was a lovely one ;) Still laughing at him getting busted trying as hard as he could to circumvent the purpose of the monitor by using his free/healthy arm as much as possible. Some people... find ways of doing what they want, whatever the obstacles. nice finishing line, there: Jemma reminding him what the 'fussing' is really all about. Him, not hte robot he feels he has to be. I am way, way, way behind with AOS but on teh basis of reading this and helping out a little, I would be gutted if they made him a 'baddie!' |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good story so far! I look forward to the next update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the call out! Very sweet :) Was intrigued reading through the end section of this - which of course is new to me in the writing, if not the outline. While it is hugely Garrett's fault (and that of his evil family) that ward has had to build such a colossal wall around himself (bring on the pink floyd!) he can be a colossally hard man to please, eh? Blimey. Talk about having a talent for being wholly unable to accept a gesture in the spirit intended. Makes you want to beat him (gently) round the head or shake some sense into him. This isn't a criticism of where you took the end of the chapter... It seems very true to character, to me. If we had him suddenly joining in all cheerful I'd have thought "eh? Wass goin' on here?" It's good to see there's still some thawing to do. I thought you captured the in/out moves into consciousness really well, with all it's latent confusion. Old emotions overlap new ones in a situation that he can't control, in which he's caught between his usual terror of not being on top of things, and the need to just rest. Loved the Jemma-Fitz double act over the bed bath. Lol! Nice one - looking forward to the continuation! Tig xxxz |
![]() ![]() ![]() your style seems like it's getting smoother with each chapter. What I really like about this one is your balance between dialogue, and the thoughts and actions that go with it - while setting out their exchange with total clarity. That's actually really hard to do and so this was a joy to follow. You also have a fantastic range of physical regrouping gestures. Usually I find continuous changes of perspective from one character's thoughts and feelings to another (after a couple of paragraphs) distracting, but not so here. They bounced off each other really nicely. I loved May's approach to talking to Ward, and her sort of closed-off compassion: she, too, knows what it's like to shut oneself into a box. And he seems to respond well to her 'sweet' way of asking things, hehe ;) sweet first, then self-sacrificing in dredging up painful stuff for his benefit, and I loved that he stayed quiet and acknowledged that if only by continuing to listen. And then the turnaround with May taking him down? Really nicely done! I love the way she prompted it in him, and then dealt with it - and that he kind of got why she had to do it in the way she did. great chapter - looking forward to 4 :) tig xxx |
![]() ![]() ![]() I thought it was lovely that Fitz managed to get under Ward's skin without rupturing anything - which is no mean feat given the state that Ward's in... thanks as much to Garrett as Lorelei and Sif... I'm looking forward to seeing them training! And it's a good way to keep them both occupied: use the strengths of one to boost the strengths of the other. Like Fitz's strength of being open (whether that's a conscious thing or not) has clearly worked a degree of soothing magic on the tightly-contained Ward. I thought Fitz's point about still doing their jobs, but for the wrong team, was a really good one. tig xxx |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think one of my favourite lines is about nobody's not-very-nice being nicer than Phil's not-very-nice. Lol - so succinct and perfect! and I love the way he initially sort of struggles to get into the conversation. You have a really nice balance between what he's thinking and what he actually says. it's a nice comedic contrast. I thought the snapshot image of Ward's lack-of-coping just with the punchbag was really strong. And love it that Phil, for now, has refused Ambush as an option. their back and forth was nicely done: Ward in brittle-mode; Coulson trying not to snap him. the puppy-dog imagery worked really well, and I thought that the shared-punishment gambit as a thinking tool was genius, and Very, very Coulson. coming back to enjoy more tomorrow :) tig xxxx |
![]() ![]() Excellent take on that episode! Of course Ward would react - and not in a healthy way - to the mind control. I love the idea that it was Coulson who could get through to him, but that it was the girls who noticed. "if there was anyone whose 'not very nice' was nicer, she'd never met them." :) Very nicely written! /Belker |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww this was great. Thank you for addressing the issue of what Ward went through at Lorelei's hands, because I think that's been overlooked by the show so far, as well as most of the AOS fandom. And Coulson's line: "Noted. Have one anyway." And Coulson looking at Ward as a puppy was really freaking adorable. And. Um. You better write more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww poor Grant! And having him compared to a little starving puppy didn't help! Great job! I love your descriptions! :) |