very good

Awww loving the kellyxjohn moments and also that tenticle alien guy rocks as well. Awesome chapter.

So we is moving into the action. And did I ever mention how much I love John and Kelly? Well, I do. Thanks for the update!

Good progress in all areas. John and Kelly were friends before all else. It will carry them through this deployment. Now for a rescue!

Really good, keep it up! :3 No mistakes I could find anywhere with it. :)

Hello there, nice to see, read you again! XD there is something amazing as seeing how John is growing as a Captain and as a better leader, to make him go true all this obstacles and situations he normally wouldn't even think about, as a spartan there was not need but as a captain it is important, good for him he has Kelly to remind him.

Not surprised at the Jackels' slaving methods. This is just the tip of the iceberg.

I don't like Tuckit

Great!

It's been quite a wait hehe. I really enjoy reading this chapter. The Huragok's part was very well written too. I have to say I love the way you paid attention to the details in the characters and surroundings and the incorporation of Spartan II's lore (Will's part) into the story. They flow really nicely and help a lot with my... imagination process. :)
Looking forward to your next chapter, Koriat!

Aww ending was awesome can you write more fluff :)

Long wait but loved the chapter, interesting use of engineers and a unpredictable plot so far

You have the Huragok down pat! Far Too Heavy's "don't argue with me on this" stance would make a great picture. Add Quick Flying with his Kelly hair arm band and it would be even better! Sad that the imprisoned Huragok could not bring himself to continue. Such sweet creatures and he was so damaged mentally.

I love this story. It makes me smile. :)

Neeed moarr johnxkelly fluffy romance please