The only BLOODY REASON people like this fic is because they actually enjoy reading horny sex stuff. You have twisted Kel beyond the limit. You might as well give the characters different names and publish this as an original fiction. They're that warped. I don't even RECOGNISE Neal. If it weren't for his name, he might as well be your stupid little OC. Before reading this, I had no idea that Tamora Pierce's characters could be so out of character.

You can't write, you think you can, and you have the worst stories in the fandom. No wait, in ANY fandom.

Not only that, but you are continually using modern slang such as "yeah", "ok", "hi", "hey"-why has no one criticised this yet?

I'll be back. I'm not even half done criticising how gods-awful this fic is. It's called fanFICTION, not fanCRAP.

Hahaha. This has been very amusing so far, thank you.

I just have on comment to make on something that makes me cringe whenever they bring it up.

Empath's feel emotions, telepaths read thoughts.

That's it, other then that I've been enjoying this very much. Never read such a funny Kel before this. Zhai'helleva.

~Morgan

how interesting, i just read all 16 chapters and it's like 10 to 2. so anyway, it was pretty good but i have to go now and get some sleep.

*cries* how could you? *sob, sob* that makes me all depressed... which makes me even sadder, 'cause if my friend stephen finds out that i'm depressed, he'll give me a hour long lecture about how depresion leads to suicide... heh, he's funny, but makes no point.

anyways...

you're an evil, evil lady! mwa! make it right, you can't END a story wiv a cliffy! thats just not nice! hehheh, please,please,please, i beg of you,update soon, or suffer me the lectures of stephen, and suffer you the wrath of the evil...

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bwahahaha! BWAHAHAHAHA! hehheh. please?

luv yas,

-KiWi

UPDATE PLEASE! PLEASE!

Jesus Christ, woman! Why haven't you updated? this story is so awesome...and kinda random and different, but awesome none the less! PLEASE update soon! I can't take the suspense! will kel be with dom? or will she break up the wedding? UPDATE SOON, FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!

as much as I love Neal, he IS a little TOO obsessed with sex! and poor Dom! he has no idea what's going on! i feel bad for him...Kel IS kinda cheating on him! and cleon is just TOO funny! haha! can't wait to read more!

YOU ARE EVIL! COMPLETELY BLOODY EVIL! How could you do that? EVIL!

*Coughs* Ahem. Having got that out of my system, I can now tell you that I really like this story. So, you'd better update! Please? Pretty please?

omg i love this story! I'n laughing, crying, gaping...love it! But where's Merric? and when can Kel actually speak to Raoul or Alanna or anyone? i know, i know, there are more chappies but still...where's merric?

oh! I like this story! I usually hardly ever read Tortall fanfics, because I love them so much, but this one is REALLY good! (especially since I love Neal, Dom, and kinda Cleon...Owen is gonna be here too, right?) Can't wait to read more...when I get a chance! lol, LOVE IT!

When are you gonna update? or are you even gonna? if you are update PLEASE! SOON!

ah! how awful! i hate to say it, but i agree, about the comment about yourself, that is. it was a good story, and then... then this! they need to be together! what am i going to do! you should write a sequel! please please please please please please?

PLEASE UPDATE! you haven't updated forever! HURRY!

OMG do you KNOW HOW LONG PEOPLE HAVE WAITED FOR YOU TO UPDATE?

GET UP THE NEXT CHAPTER!

PLEASE UPDATE! pretty please? with sugar on top? I LOVE THIS STORY! I really want to see how this develops now! Its so.. intense. YOu convey their emotions so well that I find myself thrown into Tortall; I feel what Kel is feeling, what Neal is feeling, what Cleon and the others see and feel. Your writing style is excellent, and you seem to be able to stick to a plotline very well. PLEASE UPDATE!