I swear the solar flare is probably the second most used named technique in dragon ball

re god!

Meh, why does Bardock have to get involved in everyone's story it just ruins everything

NOOOOOO. I WAS HOPING FOR A GOHAN X LIME SHIP

Goku’s actually 5’7”, as is Gohan

Oh, man, I couldn't believe it when you references the "it's over 9.000" meme like that! Hilarious! I don't think a dbz fic, is a dbz fic, unless it makes fun of that line.

I liked the story to me this felt better than that of Canon sure it did have some issues but overall it was good and dark and I love dark stories.

and it when go shit with the mating thingy bullshit.

sorry if like the story but I really dislike how dark gohan got, and 18 wouldn't have meddle into it.

Not sure why you gave super saiyan to the OC girl instead of to Goten and Trunks, but I assume it's half because she's you're original character and half so she would win. That doesn't make her stronger, it indicates that she needed a boost to win and could not have won on her own merit.

Ugh, Videls fugly short hair.

I like that this fic’s Videl recognizes and accepts her feelings for Gohan.

If you want there to be issues with Gohan’s treatment of Videl, you’ll have to go back to previous chapters and write him treating her badly. All he’s done is glare at her once after she started it, and then once or twice more with much less force. After that and for most chapters he’s just smirked at her after messing with her for fun. Now you’re writing like he’s been horrible to her or something.

Finding a guy who is bad is hard. Which I guess is part of why “bad boys” are hits with girls because they’re rare and therefore a bragging right kinda like getting a rare trading card and showing it off.

Cauterizing a wound causes a very high chance of infection. Leaving the bullet and cloth in the wound would have had a low chance of infection with modern disinfectant and other such medicines. Great job, Gohan achieved the exact opposite of the reason you gave him for tending to her wound in the first place. Not to mention the seared flesh will have to be cut away.

The media always hates justice in all its forms because they know that they are wicked and fear justice coming to them. The media’s opinion means nothing. The average person smiles when criminals are killed, especially terrorists.

Technically, he’s not a murderer. Unlawful killing is murder. I don’t think there is any nation with a law that prevents people from killing hostile armed combatants. Vigilantism, sure, but whether this even counts or not is debatable because again armed warriors so killing them can be argued as nation defense. Not that courts care, they hate anyone willing to protect themselves. Much like wanting to disarm a populace never happening unless the one’s doing it intend to do something they believe would cause a mss uprising or rejection of their authority. Government power anywhere relies heavily on force, after all.

Such great concept... I'm not one for so much unwanted angst in a character who made an error in judgment as a child but hey. One thing that is hard to fathom though is Dende,who brings men from the brink of death as child cant heal a shoulder properly. Dende is not a run of the mill physician, but, hey I guess you took these liberties to enhance the story you wanted to tell.