Reviews for Bad Intentions |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This is amazing! Amber&Jason are so cute together! |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome... hope you update this soon :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter! Amber is really an interesting character. I really can't wait to know the rest of her past. Yeah, transcripts sometimes can get really confusing. But another suggestion, I saw some of the dialogues from one person but you put it in different paragraphs, which is really confusing sometimes. Like for example: "So Amber," he began, drawing her attention. "What are you doing here?" "Oh," she grinned excitedly. "I'm chaperoning," she pointed to herself. "He," she pointed at Jason, "is the new school counselor, and as such, is required to be here." I feel like there are many people in the conversation and then I realized it's only Ezra and Amber talking. It will be easier to read when you're changing it to: "So Amber," he began, drawing her attention. "What are you doing here?" "Oh," she grinned excitedly. "I'm chaperoning," she pointed to herself. "He," she pointed at Jason, "is the new school counselor, and as such, is required to be here." It's just a little suggestion 'cause your story is great but there are few things in grammar and writing way that needs to be fixed to make it better. Hope you update soon! |
![]() ![]() Please update |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey! So glad you did a double update! It was amazing to wake up, grumbling about having to go to work and then class and finding out you had updated again! Can't wait for the next update! xoxo |
![]() ![]() Wow twice in one day that is amazing. I wish it would happen all the time. I really hope that Amber or Jason don't hook up with anyone else other then each other. Also are you gonna have Jason in the rest of season 1? And keep going through 2? Coz that's some of the best Jason moments except no aria obviously amber instead. Really excited to see Jason and spencer as siblings |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey! Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one! xoxo |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG who is it? Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yes you must update before Friday! I need a new update I love this |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting chapter...can't wait to see what is going to happen in the next chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() OH MY GOD HOW COULD YOU DO THAT :O THAT CLIFF HANGER THOUGH. WHY. :( Can't wait for the next one! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh wow, the suspense is killing me here! Your twist is really good. Although sometimes I get confuse who is talking in the story. Can't wait for the next one! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Reveal who? I need to know! |
![]() ![]() Wow this just keeps getting better. Can't wait for more please update soon. Jason is awesome |
![]() ![]() ![]() This probably us terrible to say but i cannot wait for when Hanna gets hit by the car! Yeah, that was terrible to say, but seriously. I really wanna see Amber's reaction. I love this story! Update ASAP |