Reviews for Hero or Monster |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You have an interesting idea, and your Grammer is on point. However, everything kinds ends there. No offense, but your first chapter alone is filled with a lot of plot holes, contradictions, and plot points that feel and are very forced. You give Naruto his empathic abilities and claim that it allows him to truly understand everyone, and when you truly understand someone "you love them". Your Naruto originally comes off as enlightening and able to see the truth to world and all that. However, that quickly changes when his empathic abilities only mean shit for Konoha. That he would love Konoha, yet hate the cloud nin for similar reasons. It's a really forced point in trying to give a reason why Naruto loves Konoha and its residence, despite the extreme emotional and (in this case) physical abuse. There's more I can say, but no one really gives a shit and I don't feel like typing anymore. I'm not saying give up, but there is a lot of things that can be improved. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This fic...I'm speechless. |
![]() ![]() I am a female and I love the story |
![]() ![]() ![]() WHY IS THIS ABANDONED? |
![]() ![]() Great work |
![]() ![]() Great other one naruto just kiss there buts all ready I'm sick and tired of naruto being a ass kisser |
![]() ![]() Great other one they beat me hate me but I love them naruto just bow down and kiss there buts all ready they hate but I love them kiss kiss kiss there buts |
![]() ![]() Why don't you write further...? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good story |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really, really, really want to see the end of this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Has this been abandoned? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like your story I hope continue |
![]() ![]() ![]() I only read a few paragraphs and this is epic. It totally reminds me of terror blade from dota with the ability to see people. This is going to be fun. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omg update plzzz |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ayo wtf? I just found Gold! tnks for the awesome fianfic! |