|Reviews for Clarity|
| nimja chapter 9 . 7/30
what's up with chapter 9, 11, and 12. they look like you opened a archive file on a computer with a story in between the nonsense.
| Child of Dreams chapter 12 . 6/5
Same for this one...
| Child of Dreams chapter 11 . 6/5
This chapter's text format needs fixing too...
| Child of Dreams chapter 9 . 6/5
The text format for this chapter needs fixing...
| TheNStorm chapter 23 . 2/11
Well, it's not the word monster the first story was, but it was still quite a bit to read in a single day. I think overall that I very much enjoyed.
One negative: a bit too Modern Western Political Thought -y to feel quite as realpolitik as I think you'd like. Put another way, if this were a corporate organizational explanation you'd be doing a thorough Human Resources analysis, while the corporation solidly adheres to Z theory organization. You can still paint the picture very well indeed, but some of the subtleties get lost.
One positive: Character growth. My first critique back in the previous story was that you were writing more of a mood with plot than a full world. That changed after the first fifteen chapters or so, and you started to really flesh the world out in sustainable ways. Going forward to story end, and then accelerating rapidly through this arc, you've embraced character growth much more spectacularly than before, and I find your depictions both more clearly written and to be much better personalized to their chracters-such that they gain a good semblance of life.
| djoshuaclark chapter 24 . 1/31
Itatchi probly got scared shitless, imagine having a dojutsu the same as yours being plucked infront of you.
| Spade Zi chapter 1 . 12/9/2022
Just a Spade casually dropping by
| Tonks94 chapter 24 . 11/10/2022
Love this story. I’m so sad it’s over :(
Honesty one of the best fanfic out there. I was disappointed with the ending but I guess it had to end at some point. But it felt very rushed and didn’t really end to be honest. But that’s ok. At least you gave us something instead of abandoning the story. I kinda wished Aiko had gotten her original eyes back. I feel like there was just something unnatural about having the rinnagan, especially the impact on her health. I also wished she’d ended with a relationship with someone. And I don’t know some fluffy chapters would have ended things on a positive note. But I’m also just reaching here. It’s still been an amazing story, and I can’t believe how much work and effort you’ve put into it.
| Alechaos Ogigio 2 chapter 24 . 8/2/2022
I've noticed a lot of coding pushed into this wonderful story, like 999999px, veranda. some chapters I had to completely skip because there was so much in the way this was an A story, but if you have the chance, can you fix that? this was my second time reading this amazing story.
| Kikidium31 chapter 11 . 12/17/2021
it's really getting in my nerves! I wish you would go back and delete all the code... love the story though
| jingerr chapter 1 . 8/21/2021
is this book complete?
| BlackStarMage chapter 12 . 6/9/2021
broken chapter here too!
| BlackStarMage chapter 11 . 6/9/2021
Very broken chapter here Author!
| Guest chapter 18 . 2/24/2021
I'm sure there are reasons, but I'm curious why they haven't assigned new psychologists to her. The current ones very obviously aren't helping, and if she doesn't like or trust them then they never will. My best guess is that they don't want to give more people classified information about her.
| Sentariana chapter 1 . 1/17/2021
Oh My God! Aiko has been brainwashed! She's killing innocent nin and Konoha nin! This is awful!