Reviews for Magic Online |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting |
![]() ![]() ![]() i hope you havint died this is one of my favorite fanfics |
![]() ![]() ![]() Seriously fantastic story! This story is so wonderfully written, I could barely stop reading it and I may or may not have spent a few hours at work reading, rather than working. Thank you for writing and sharing with us. Loved the fic and am definitely browsing your other stories for more goodness. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Holy freaking cow and a half that was awesome! You put more work into this chapter alone than I have into half my stories! The pure science behind your explanations made me go back through and read it again because I was so fascinated! I can't wait until you update! But I do understand and respect the fact that people have lives outside of FFEven if I don't, lol) Honestly, your puzzle piecing skills are bar none. Keep it up! ~Silverleone |
![]() ![]() ![]() ... I'd like to see an Abridged!omake where Abridged!Kirito and Abridged!Asuna were in SAO, along with Abridged!Tiffany, etc. That would be either hilarious or horrifying. Or both. I'm not sure which. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This would be a lot more fun to read if you didn't rush everything so damn much. The whole encounter with Lisbeth was compressed to a paragraph with not a single quotation, just a small wall of info on what happened. I'm not reading this for a report on Harry Potters's life, I'm reading to experience his story. Stop skipping all the actual experiences. Literally, the people in this story who never met him know him better than I, The Reader, do only on the reputation. We don't learn that his name was Tracker James or how happy he seemed to everyone or how he dealt with those who cheated him way way after. His first fight with his dragon boss felt cheap with that lightning (it's magic that controls the world, but the virtual realm is controlled purely on logic and code, making magic legitimately impossible on that scale). Why is he obsessed with Dragons? Why doesn't he ever tell anyone that his name isn't actually James? Why why why, all questions we don't have answered because you only periodically allow us to experience his story, rather than read a report on how his adventure is going. |
![]() ![]() ![]() this was probably the most annoying chapter I've read in a while, because of the sheer pity party. I've been there, and people who actually go through this don't like to talk in-depth about it unless they are actually searching for pity. |
![]() ![]() ![]() .. You do realize that without the hospital taking care of Harry, Harry will die of starvation and dehydration very quickly right? The magic can't just make food, but it just sealed and locked an unconscious boy in a home that no one remembers him in. You literally set him up to die. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Like most of the authors stories I initially loved this one, but grew disillusioned with it quickly. Midget Harry with more physical scars than Mad-Eye, emotional trauma out the ass that all but cripples him on a regular basis, and deliberately handicapping himself by not using spells he learned in his previous world. And like most of the author's fics, this is more of a review of what is happening/happened. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The author seems to have a fascination with midget sized MC's. Apparently even 2 years after the stasis spell ended, that kept him from aging, he's still not aging. Or perhaps just not growing. A "side effect" apparently. It's bad enough when a MC starts off way too young (like in most of this authors fics I've read) but now this one isn't even growing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lovely. It's great when authors disfigure their MC's for no reason. His body taking the delayed damage his soul sustained over the 2 years in game is pure bs. I could understand it if he kept his current wounds when the game ended, but ALL wounds and scars? Nah. Sadistic author. |
![]() ![]() ![]() He spent 6 weeks solo. Independent. Now he can barely string a sentence together without bawling, whining, or flinching. Why the author loves making broken child MC stories ill never understand. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story, please start writing again! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very Interesting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is this abandoned? I really hope you get back to this! |