Reviews for Magic Online |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Wait, I thought he was 12/13...maybe I'm confusing this fanfic with another...wouldn't be the first time, I think. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harry Hermione forever... tbh it was really hard to read at around mid of start and actual mid part of fanfic till Hermione finally brought him down after that I just loved it crazy... I just wished it was more and that he was grown up n Them being together for real... the feelings you brought were really something... idk much about anything but this was one of best for me... thank you so much for that.. hopefully you'll continue... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know it has been well over a year but I would love to see this story continued. It is such a great tale and blends Harry Potter and sword art online the best of any. I miss reading this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() HELLO IS ANYONE THERE? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love this srory wish gheir was more |
![]() ![]() ![]() Having Luna stumble upon the diadem really doesn't help make your story any better, if anything you already have too much going on with Harry disregarding reality, I assume getting Hermione to be seen as a love interest and Voldemort is already a big of enough threat. The best fanfictions are when the main events and most everything not changed by the mc stay the same yet the overall story reads differently from the original. Changing main events shows a lack of creativity by not being able to keep the story different while keeping the events the same. So you end up having to make a new variable which in this case is Luna somehow getting extremely lucky and unlucky at the same time, in a way that reads as if Luna would've never been able to find it without the author forcing it to happen. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, if Harry is going to stay there in two years or so, how would he get nutrients from stuff like food? Wouldn’t lack of sunlight also be bad for him. I really like your inclusion of the blood wards, though, and am interested in seeing how you will work around this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why 175? Such a completely random number... wish he still had his levels though. That would have been awesome. He still has his skills atleast. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww... he can't use swords then? Swords are like the entire point of SAO! I hope he can atleast use magic though... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm legit almost crying - please let them all be reunited! Oh I'm sobbing |
![]() ![]() ![]() Poor Agil finding out that not only is his friend a 9 year old kid but a horribly abused kid who believes that no one loves or cares about him And to find that out while in a game that literally kills you for real when you die except this 9 year old died a thousand times and regenerated while feeling all that pain Christ this is so tragic I'm loving it! '(I'm aware that sounds really horrible but your writing is excellent and really engaging!) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Salazar was never portrayed in canon, period. None of the founders were. All we have of them are people's perceptions and history books. And HP is well known for having both of those things be unreliable at best. |
![]() ![]() ![]() In the end of the second paragraph here, where it says "hold his arm steadier", 'steadier' should be 'more steadily'. It's a tricky scenario, because at first glance it looks like you'd need an adjective to describe the wand there, but in actuality what you're describing is not the wand, but the action of holding it. Hence the need for an adverb instead. |
![]() ![]() Can't wait for your next update, hope you are well in this mess. |
![]() ![]() I hope you haven't given up on this story. I absolutely love it. |