|Reviews for What Happens in Vegas|
| pwtcmcneil chapter 18 . 6/29
holy crap, you are one of "those" writers, the kind that can turn a regular story into an emotional masterpiece. this story has been an experience like few others and I can't wait to see what else you have written.
| UltimateGohanssj10 chapter 4 . 5/19
Omg, the Undersiders! Where's Skitter?
| ImplicitExistence chapter 4 . 3/16
oh my god this worm reference made my day!
| DaSalvatore chapter 18 . 2/29
So despite my very determined reaction to the early chapters of this story, I /finally/ decided to give it a go and mentally ignore everything about it linked to the ACMS. Imagine my surprise when there's literally nothing about such a divisive plot idea for the rest of the story. I'll be honest, it utterly baffles me why you used the ACMS in this a background when nothing about them as needed to any of the plots. Even the wedding stuff could have happened without including that angle. An angle that would have been much better included if it was part of a longer story where it could actually be explored.
Aside from that, I'm totally conflicted over this story. Everything character-wise was really superb - You explored Tonks' thoughts nicely and showed Remus' negatives while only going a little OTT when they were brought up (while his violent reaction to the collar during Willow's birthday was understandable, it didn't feel like a 'Remus' reaction while the anger over being heroes in America and ignoring the war certainly did feel like him). The growing relationship between Willow and Raven was perfectly done. Its slow burn between two young women who had far too much put on their young shoulders and found something special in each other and who didn't even know what they had until they were finally apart. Fantastic.
As much as you're a Harry/Luna shipper, her being Willow's ex didn't add anything to the story. Her appearance and wisdom could have been given without their past relationship and the "issue" of wife meeting ex was a paragraph or two and then totally ignored so it's not like that even got examined in the story. It felt far more like an in-joke to your own writing than anything else.
Speaking of in-jokes. This is a Harry Potter/Teen Titans crossover but apparently half the story involves fighting your own versions of bad guys from a THIRD IP. I've read the reviews and it's obvious that fans of Worm were eating the Brigands up but as someone who doesn't know the series, I kept wanting to throw the characters out the nearest airlock and gleefully watch them suffocate. They completely took over the crossover and it wasn't as though they had any long-term goals.
The fight scenes were as solidly written as all your other work but the very fact that the story's last chapter being the epilogue/wrap up is about taking the group down pretty much sums up what I feel went wrong with this story. That being it totally lost track of the core relationship the initial situation brought about in order to have fun playing around with characters who had nothing to do with the initial concept of the story.
Which is a shame because, as I stated above, everything written around the HP and DC universes was still extremely engaging. The small scene between Robin and Batman were expertly done to show the damaged but still tight mentor and father/son bond between them while Dumbledore's insane mental ramblings shows exactly the type of ego nutjob he is. And the fact you had the Aurors takedown Riddle and end the Blood War the same time as Dumbledore pulled the kidnapping was utter genius.
| Stephen chapter 18 . 1/31
What happened after that and please update the story soon.
| Aren serathy chapter 11 . 1/14
No offense but you’re naming sense is atrocious. Although I will be thoroughly amused by screaming “MEDIC!” in my head when ever I read it.
| ChiDead chapter 18 . 12/26/2019
That was wonderful.
| DaSalvatore chapter 2 . 11/18/2019
I've enjoyed your work before (loved the first Black Queen story, still haven't gotten around to finishing 2 and 3 yet and Fairy Heroes remains one of my favourites to read) but I'll have to miss this one.
Your author notes make you seem as though you sometimes write /just/ to subvert tropes in similar fashion to how George Martin has talked about and this isn't always a good idea. Making the US a racist magical society the way you have while keeping the Las Vegas plot just doesn't work.
The statute of secrecy came into effect a century prior to the US being formed and two centuries before the civil war. In order for the CMA to come about the magicals would have to have continued a close relationship with the non-magical people enough to where they picked up their racist attitudes (on top of blood purist attitudes), win the civil war, form their own highly racist government but then work alongside the non-magical governemnt (something that they must obviously hate) enough where they have magical churches in Las Vegas side-by-side with the non-magical area.
The problem is that you went so far as to have 3/4s of the population not be allowed to use wands (and there's not been an uprising?) yet there's apparently no issue in mixing magical/non-magical businesses to the point anyone can drunkenly walk off the street and get married in a Las Vegas chapel. It makes no sense for a society to be so bigotted that only Purebloods can use wands yet the rest of the magical society is still apparently capable of getting somewhere enough to where they can use potions/rituals/other foci to cover the difference but haven't forced through a change. It doesn't make sense that such a bigotted society would be linked so well to the non-magical government that they have a magical version of Vegas in Vegas including chapels. It also doesn't make sense that such a racist government continues in a country that has the sheer volume of superheroes (especially the magical ones) as DC-America does.
All of these issues /can/ be explained away but it doesn't feel like the story will do that. Instead, it merely comes across as a way of going against type just to shake things up. And really, you didn't /need/ to make America Umbridge's paradise just to avoid the USmagically tollerant society concept.
There's also a sense that Tonks doesn't really know Willow on a personal enough level for the Las Vegas part of the plan to have been that good an idea in the first place. The Las Vegas marriage fic is such a wonky concept to start with (magicals being allowed to marry when smashed out of their heads) that an author is always better off making things as simple as possible in the beginning until after the morning realisation scenes.
So yeah. The writing is still your usual level but the work itself feels very much as forcing specific things into place even if they don't properly fit just to tell the story exactly as you wanted to.
| feauxen chapter 8 . 10/28/2019
First the Undersiders, and now Slaughterhouse Nine? I thought this was a DC crossover, not a Worm crossover.
| Fred Bitune chapter 7 . 9/28/2019
So you write manipulative, borderline fanatic Dumbledore into all your fics I take it... Kinda boring.
| HJP4Life chapter 18 . 8/20/2019
Amazing! I have never read a teen titans crossover and your story definitely did not disappoint! Well done, I look forward to reading more of your work.
| YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 18 . 6/25/2019
This was great, shame you have no plans for a sequel though. Would have loved seeing more Willow/Raven.
Ah well, maybe one day you will decide to continue on with this world.
| YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 13 . 6/25/2019
Yeah sure, i believe you when you say they did nothing but kissing. While in the tub, naked, and left bite marks on each other, and seemed to have very satisfied smile on one whilst the other a smug smirk. Yup, i really really believe you.
Hmm, you know know that she is married to someone who by here laws is of age wouldn't Raven be considered her legal guardian? Not the Dursleys.
| Neiperie chapter 11 . 6/4/2019
Again, much rudeness sent my brother's way, he should know better than to hide a gem like this away ... Just a thought, but what about "Airmed" as an identity for Willow, after the Irish patron of healing and medicinal herbology?
| cameron1812 chapter 18 . 5/13/2019
Outstanding! Thank you!