|Reviews for One Good Archer of Mirkwood|
| Luann Stubbs chapter 1 . 10/8/2022
| Al chapter 2 . 11/13/2018
Have read four of your stories now, starting with Legolas Shall Be for the Elves, and find them intriguing and worth reading and rereading. You bring out new possibilities for the characters without being out of character. Hope you will write more!
I do wonder who the white haired elf in this chapter is ?
| L Crawford chapter 1 . 2/21/2004
This is a great story. It's very beautifully described and I enjoyed reading it very much. Rather upset that Legs didn’t get with Sian but I guess he couldn’t could he? *sigh* Ah well, maybe in another fic they could meet up again, eh? ;)
| TigerLily713 chapter 1 . 12/23/2003
I very much enjoyed this and look forward to reviewing more of your work. ~Lily
| Frodo3791 chapter 1 . 9/3/2003
This was a well written story. I especially enjoyed the bits of humor in it. It wasn't that crappy stuff either. It fit well. Legolas' and Sian's encounters with each other on this little trip were wonderfully written and well done. Nice work! (Oh yes, your little in-jokes were quite amusing, in my opinion... nicely done!)
| Jaded Scorpio chapter 1 . 8/31/2003
I left a review long ago, but the dark void of cyberspace (where webpages go when they die) seems to have eaten it.
This is the best Legolas fanstory I have ever read.
I love Sian, I love inexperienced Legolas, young but old, mystical-this story is so well done, and I love the in-jokes! I have recommended this story to everyone I know.
| Melika chapter 1 . 6/27/2003
That was a very entertaining story! I love how Legolas was portrayed - very mystical, older than Sian yet young and somewhat naive. I think that was how Tolkien intended him to be. Anywho, it was a cute story and I enjoyed reading int. Good work!
| Fey Halfkin chapter 1 . 5/1/2003
A long and truly wonderful story with Legolas as a youth. The original character, Sian, is really well done to make her unique and likeable. How she deals with her meager backup of one scrawny elf child while tracking orcs for her lost horses...very believable and cute! It wasn't rushed or anything. Thanks.
| Faerfaen chapter 1 . 4/21/2003
This was great! I really really enjoyed it and laughed most of the way through. O)
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| jambaby1963 chapter 1 . 2/23/2003
I loved this story. It's exactly how I would imagine Legolas to be.
| Ithilien chapter 1 . 1/10/2003
Oh my Eru! This is great! A fabulous job here. I couldn't tear my eyes away. More from you, that's what I want. I am definitely adding you to my Fave's list, and most certainly promoting this fiction in my next chapter update (see "The Hunting Trip"). Beautiful! Brilliant! Lovely!
Good with the bad though, I do have two critiques, and hopefully you will see them for what they are intended - ways to help you improve your style and make you an even better writer. Ready for this? Okay, here goes:
1) For the most part you have the charm of language down well. I love the integration of book-verse into slang terminology and was thrilled beyond words for your tooling of description. Breathlessly magnificent! But a few modern Americanisms snuck in there, and when they came through, they stuck out, IMHO, like a sore thumb. Words like "kid", "okay", and "yeah" are contemporary creations coming about in only the last hundred years or so, and they really don't fit with the poetic turn of Olde English style we see in emulation of Tolkien-speak. You might want to rethink this in places.
2) The POV (Point-of-View) shifts are a little maddening. Don't worry, I think all new writers do it until it is pointed out to them. Try to keep your perspective to what is happening in one person's mind per scene. You tend to skip around a lot, and I found myself scratching my head a few times going "Whose thoughts are these?" As a budding writer it is hard to resist as we want to tell everything going on in their heads, but when you keep changing you stop being the voice inside the character's head, and more the voice of God. Truthfully, though, stick with one POV and you will find you improve because you still have to find a way to tell the other person's feelings through physical expression, not thoughts. I think you are more than capable of it.
Lastly I wanted to say how I treasure finding an author who can write as if they have experienced something. Life teaches the greatest lessons and with it comes understanding that you just can't find in youth. How many times have I come across stories that have a member of the fellowship screaming, "You don't understand me," to his buddies with absolutely nothing tangible to hold on to that emotion. So bravo to you! I do hope there is more in the works for you.
| girltype chapter 1 . 12/7/2002
beautiful, utterly breath-taking. I have no words to tell you just how wonderful of a writer I think you are. whatever writer's brew you're drinking, keep drinking it.
| PuterPatty chapter 1 . 12/5/2002
I have spent much of tonight immersed in this story, entranced by your writing (got a little distracted by Friends and Scrubs for a while). But I invested so much time in it because it was so rich in detail and so captivating and so delightful, I didn't want the story to ever end. I regret not one single minute spent reading this beautiful story.
What a wonderful tale of a very young and very green :) Legolas. So here we find the prince of Mirkwood seeking his first taste of adventure. This was a new experience for me as well-I've never read such a magnificent story detailing our favorite elf's first adventure outside the halls of his father. Great idea for a story.
Your OC, Sian, was wonderful. Her character is completely drawn and very likeable. She is very strong and very in tune with Arda-she was quite the match for Legolas. I love how she was teaching our elf a thing or two about tracking and fighting. And in return, Legolas taught her much about elves, though it would take many lifetimes to learn all. The development of their friendship was perfectly paced and perfectly played out. Great job!
Again, lots and lots of beautiful descriptions. If I were to point out my favorites, alas, I fear I would be copying this entire fic, so I shan't do so here. But again, I love how describe everything with a reference to animals and their behavior. You have this mastered.
One thing that really stuck with me was the line about Legolas listening to his elders, even when they were younger. I loved it. I always wonder how he felt following Aragorn's lead during the Quest. Anyway, very clever and very insightful of you to point out that when it comes to the interaction between Men and Elves, being one's elder has nothing to do with age, but with experience.
Oh and I love all the names she called Legolas. So funny, yet so sad that I've heard these names before in other serious fanfics seeking to give the poor elf a pet name from some annoying OFC. ::shudders::
I loved your in-jokes. I caught the "Rhys" right away. And the other ones are just as clever. I saw another, I'm not sure if it was deliberate or not-"the bloomin' prince of Mirkwood." Bloom, Orlando Bloom. Make me chuckle. The little bits of humor were great additions.
I wish I had the time to expound more on this truly tremendous fic. But as I am not an elf, I must seek rest. This story is one I will definitely be rereading over and over again, just to relish in its glory once more. You are a remarkable writer, and I hope you will be writing more stories about our favorite elf soon.
| Aislynn chapter 1 . 12/5/2002
I really, really loved this fic! Legolas as a young elf in the elven equivalent of his "tweens", already a (somewhat) capable fighter, but still quite unexperienced and full of all that romantic stuff and hero stories... the way he and sian the cynical, experienced trader-warior woman are working together works like a charm. I especially liked the scene after the battle when the young archer had suffered a bad bump on the head and was thinking he was going to die... "I'm now going to the hallsof Mandos to sit with my ancestors..." sweeet, I just can see that little youngstter elf, deluded y all those hero-stories, trying to take his percieved upcoming death bravely and heroically. I also liked very much Sians reponse.
At some moments, I actually feared it would turn into a romance and Sian would turn out to be a dreaded Mary Sue (perish he thought!), but thankfully it never happened. She is a great, refreshingly cynical and really believable character, and I loved to read about her adventure. And the way Sian and her very young one good archer were both trying to understand the others culture - with questionable success - and their mutual assumptions while trying it... beautifully done!
I also liked the scene when Sian told Thranduil of the heroic way her "one good archer" helped her to regain the goods and mules, all this without a clue why the king suddenly looked less than pleased by her story... giggle! "Maybe it would get him a promotion or something..." indeed! I think not!
This is a great story, and I surely hope you will write much more! Thank you!
| Avie Kokyre chapter 1 . 11/19/2002
I'm so glad to find a good Legolas story. Too many Mary Sue's and Legolas/Aragon ones for my tastes. I like how you portayed Legolas, skilled but inexperience. My only problem with the story is that you didn't break it up into chapters or something to that degree. It made the story at little more challenging to read. Besides that, I loved it! _