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"Harry was fortunate to have a spare" ... No, Dumbles, Luna was NOT a spare! She's a full member in this triad and he would never "sacrifice a queen" to win. After all, this is no game and when it comes to the people Harry loves, it's no game!

I take it back. Albus here IS like he's portrayed in other fics. Yes, he got off his arse to fight Voldie BUT he's a disgusting manipulator that doesn't mind one child dies for his greater good. He basically said so with asking how does the life of one compare to the many...only to be surprised with the answer that, to Harry, the one life in question does matter more than any other (besides Hermione whose equal in importance to Luna).

Frankly, Molly & Arthur has a part in Ginny's obsession with Harry. They should have reigned it in when she was younger, teach her that just because she likes the stories, it doesn't mean she will "have the right" to marry him.

This Dumbledore isn't as bad as he is in other stories, actually getting off his arse to get things done, but ...did he ever get help for Ginny after she was possessed by Voldemort? That possession would only add to the mental instability of Ginny Weasley.

Dumbledore was not just going to let any of that stuff that happened in third year slide, that’s why he literally told Hermione to go back in time.

Already stupid. Why the hell would Sirius deny the use of a house he doesn’t even want?
He knows Dumbledore is going to protect Harry, why does he have to do something so out of character as denying something necessary for the coming war effort?

I don't get why the specific call out on not 'sharing' during love making. Especially since they'll continue to share afterwards and see it all then. Is this some sort of weird homophobia thing to ensure we know Luna and Hermione won't be having sex with each other, but only Harry?

This story is still fun, even years later, but the last two chapters (out of 20) are basically unnecessary. They're extremely wordy for what they do, and don't do what they do all that well. In fact, the entire part 2 is far worse than part 1. It feels like six chapters worth of wrap-up rather than the climax of the story. Overall the pacing of the story died at the end of chapter 14 and never really recovered. Still a decent story, but the structure and flow are mediocre at best. And the usage of commas as if they were periods is endemic and appalling. Every second or third sentence seems to be a run-on!

Ahhh thats amazing. Totally unexpected Animagus transformation

YES YES YES. Dumbledore a bit of pragmatism

Loved it!

Dear Author,

I was enamored with your story over the last few days as I tore through it with rabid delight. It was cute, harrowing, funny, and cathartic. I enjoyed the escalation of relationships between the main trio and felt it was wonderfully paced. I am grateful you created this piece and am gladly adding it to my list of favorites. I hope that whatever you decide to do with your life is successful and you are happy. Continue to write, you're good at it.

Sincerely,
Doggyniichan

Another winner. Your Albus was a brilliant showcase of a truly manipulative man with no empathy. Kudos.

dialogue is definitely your weakness, they sound like narration

ooooh lmao, so Voldemort's soul shard was the one that got devoured then?