|Reviews for Confessions of an Insomniac Hacktivist|
| Princess Peridot chapter 5 . 10/12
So, this is a very amusing story that is well written. That being said, it's good not great. The first thing that comes to mind when reading this are the unnecessary adjectives...everywhere. You do not need an adjective describing how quickly Coulson takes off his coat. Then there's the timing, you use seconds or instantly for description, repeatedly. It's unrealistic to start. It also shows that you're a developing writer (it's not a bad thing! It's just an observation on my part) but don't stress over it. It's something that you mature into as you write more. That's my huge problem with this. Otherwise it's just minor syntax errors.
I don't any of this to be mean. I say this only in the name of constructive criticism. I actually really enjoyed reading your work. I say this because it helps you grow as an author, it makes the story easier to read for the readers, and it takes this story from good to great.
So, thank you for your sharing your work.
| AshleyStewart09 chapter 5 . 7/13/2015
This was really good
| firerosedreamer67 chapter 5 . 9/7/2014
The quiet moments that together build a love , honest and pure , the hearts that give freely...
| firerosedreamer67 chapter 4 . 9/7/2014
Now that was sweetness plus!
| firerosedreamer67 chapter 3 . 9/7/2014
These two! Maybe they just need to sleep on it?...
| firerosedreamer67 chapter 2 . 9/7/2014
Hummming.. .."Moments like these"...
| firerosedreamer67 chapter 1 . 9/7/2014
They are just so sweet together !...Yet it is your last line that holds all the promise of what might come next!...You know, to help her...
| Skye Coulson chapter 5 . 9/5/2014
SQUEEEE! I love it! The perfect ending! :D
| Skye Coulson chapter 4 . 9/5/2014
LOVE it! I've been listening to music on my iTunes library while reading this and, right after the big emotional breakdown - just before the bit about the nightmares - it started to play "Uh Oh" by Chloe Wang (aka Chloe Bennet ... aka Skye ... lol)! hehe My computer has the most epic sense of timing! Anyway, LOVE the story and can't wait for more!
| AgentLunaA chapter 5 . 9/4/2014
Jeez! You make me need a cure like this for my eternal insomnia!
Pfff! Holy Groot! All of this was simply perfect... The timing, rythm... all the scenes flow easyly!
And for the end of my cake, I choose this Literary Image you write:
"The kiss deepened as their tonges danced around eachother and their bodies slowly mingled into one"...
| AgentLunaA chapter 4 . 9/4/2014
Lets say I'm counting 3 and 4 like one chapter ok?
What a little piece of cake you write me here!
First, like you said, Angst wasn't an argument, is a feeling, you can call her the "Trigger" on your main story. Angst, tension or any feeling can take it like the "Theme" to write. When you found both, Trigger and Theme, you work with all the small things who make stronger your line, (like the touches, the words, your metaphorical signs) all of those details make this awesome piece or writing.
Glad to find again the sweet hot cocoa and the blanket thing!
| AgentLunaA chapter 2 . 9/4/2014
Owwww boy! Step by step the story was flowing!
Seriously girl, you have to share your secret with me! How inhell you can do this amazing stories in a little small space? You're the Queen of one shot's emporium!