Reviews for After the Chamber - Lords and Ladies |
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Cillit Bang Bang chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 I've enjoyed the slice of life approach of previous chapters very much, the harem- and ancient magic shenanigans (And Hermione's description as 'Rules Loving' when she has, by this point, set a teacher on fire, ignored a direct order of her head of house, stole potions ingredients from her potions instructor, and arranged for a break-in into the Slytherin common room) notwithstanding. It's just delightful to read your character interpretations. Why you replace this most enjoyable approach with magical debt shenanigans that adds approximately nothing whatsoever is beyond me. And while your Daphne is at least somewhat distinct from the usual fanon portrayal, her state seems rather at odds with the otherwise fairly light-hearted tone of the story. Kind of clashes, tbh. The previous five chapters all made me smile. This one just makes me go 'Meh'. |
DukeBrymin chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 You mention that "the higher the level, the more powerful the wards", but then you say that level 2 is more powerful than level 4. You might want to reverse the numbering, so that the higher the level, the higher the number. |
Jarjaxle chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 Trial?...Trial of whose? This was rather nice chapter, enjoyed it very much. And you explained Daphne's condition huh. Curse...talk about petty revenge. Liked talk between Albus and Weasley's...Tough Percy is worrying me, well he is what you make him to be in canon right...and pretty Slytherin...nothing against that House, I think their infamy is just Prejudice...is he going to be turned, use any means and people necessary to get what he wants? |
davycrockett100 chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 sweet |
jkarr chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 hope some one can brake the cures |
xider chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 lki just hope sirius gets justice and by justice i mean gets his name cleared. oh as well as hagrid. |
god of all chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon... |
BloodRedDemon chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 Really like the story so far; very entertaining. I do, however, hope that you'll update sooner this time. Keep up the good (Though hopefully faster) work. |
marlastiano chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 Thanks :) |
Dracis Tran chapter 4 . 1/15/2015 First: Thank you for writing! Both at all (yay more to read!) and this piece in particular. I'll read anything that has Haphne, but vastly prefer no bashing. Two notes on things that came up in this chapter: First, what is the POV we're supposed to be in? It seems to... slide from Third Person Limited to Omniscient and back again. And even turned conversational during the "A rousing cheer erupted from three of the four tables, with polite applause from about a third of the last table. Three guesses which tables did what." line. In the end, what POV you're going for doesn't really matter from a reader's standpoint unless you need it to be a particular one for a scene later. But it is jarring to have it change in the middle. Second, Hermione and Ron's bickering. I know, it's not particularly easy to get the dynamic right. They ARE friends, they DO annoy each other [semi-constantly], but the Trio is a Trio, not two Duos anchored to one focal point. Hermione complained in an earlier chapter to Harry about how she called Ron 'Ronald' because Ron called her ''Mione'. He hasn't at all in this chapter, but Hermione has almost exclusively called him 'Ronald'. Now, if her hypocrisy is intentional and she's supposed to be wrong about this, then ignore me and keep on keepin' on. But if the dynamic is supposed to be even... it's not. Ron is more sympathetic because of it. Thanks again for writing this! *off to read more* |
ThunderClaw03 chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 If only they knew the truth about black update soon |
sh777 chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 Thanks for the update. |
geetac chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 I like the chapter very much. |
diagonalpumpkin chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 It's good to find out what is going on with Daphne, and I like that you've gone a different route with the "Ice Queen" than I've seen before. It's also kind of nice to see the Weasleys getting some help, and accepting it (even if it was under some duress). Thanks for the update, and keep up the great work. |
whatweareafreaidof chapter 6 . 1/15/2015 Since you taking about debt, How come when Ron save Harry life in first year, |