|Reviews for A Magus Among Ninjas|
| WildlyLaughing chapter 11 . 11h
I've loved the story and the way you write, so I'll definitely support The reboot as well
| Lerris chapter 11 . 5/11
Not bad so far, but Shiro is possibly overpowered. One note, you might mention this is an old version in your summary.
| Darkjaden chapter 9 . 4/18
Now this is Shiro not some gun creating wannabe.
| AmethystPone chapter 1 . 12/13/2017
Ya know...I think you missed some of the effects of some noble phantasms...
Plenty of them could negate that weird time-alter regen factor...
Like the Black key (It's isn't a noble phantasm actually, but it is extremely useful), it attacks the soul directly and will continously doing so (As long as the user will them seemingly, this details is a bit blurry for me), built to kill Dead Apostles and various supernatural creatures, no magecraft can really return losing a chunk of your deteriorating soul...
Then there is also Rule Breaker, pretty dangerous Anti-Magic NP...
Another thing is...People Die when they are killed!
Seriously, though...You can't turn back time when you aren't there to turn back in the first place, so any attack that can vaporize him instantly will work.
I'm unsure if this is a case of not knowing, or if this is a case of multiple True Magics working in tandem...
| Rankin de Merthyr chapter 1 . 10/28/2017
I read your rewrite first. The new one is definitely better, though you're a bit lacking in some aspects. I'll comment on it on the rewrite.
| lincoln time chapter 7 . 6/30/2017
I honestly had no idea who the girl was that Shirou befriended until the end. Seriously, you kept on using 'she' and 'her' so much that I couldn't tell which girl was which until the end. Do something about this? Please? Clearer POVs and actually put down the name of who has the perspective, at least in the narrative, please?
| akd48 chapter 1 . 6/28/2017
It's Germany not Russia
| Darkcrest27 chapter 11 . 6/18/2017
read and enjoyed the story how you might want to mark the story as complete and add a note to the summery that it's been rewritten
| DD chapter 1 . 3/7/2017
Reboot is definitely in order. Most of this story is done in quite poor quality. There also doesn't seem to be any particular red line in the story to follow. You just write down what you feel like without any consideration
| dragooner chapter 11 . 2/25/2017
I liked both the old and new versions.
| Guest chapter 11 . 12/22/2016
i want this story back
| Exzyne chapter 2 . 12/12/2016
The constant change of tempus, writing in present tense followed by past and back and forth, is quite harmful to the story. I recommend you decide on one and then stick with it.
| leetheresearcher chapter 11 . 12/4/2016
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! TT plzzzzzzzzz i want more right now
| TheLastGarou chapter 11 . 12/1/2016
It's somewhat disappointing to see this story won't be updated further, but also exciting to know that you'll be doing a reboot.
I look forward to it eagerly. :)
| star chapter 11 . 12/1/2016