I really like this story! The plot, the characters, everything! I like how this change in Unova after the games happened and how it affected the characters we all know and love, Like Clay and Shauntal's insanity, how Iris is slowly breaking down. (Actually, isn't Red/Blue supposed to be the youngest champ?). I hope you get inspired and write some more. I'd like to know so many things like why Shauntal is crazy, where the HELL is our lovable Bianca, Prof. Jupiter, the CC brothers (Chili and Cress), and if Fallow offers to take Giratina with her to the real world, and if Gira accepts. To me, its pretty obvious she going to try to get the legendary dragons, or she could just try to bring Giratina to beat the Prez up. Or he could help with the rebellion maybe...

DAMN CLIFFHANGER! I READ UNTIL TWO AM IN THE MORNING FOR THIS?! AAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHH!

I'm dead

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Lol I realize this story was written a long time ago and I am sorry for stumbling upon it so late. Still, I plan on reading the rest of it, but I'll take a moment to review here at chapter 9 for now until I reach the last one you wrote.

This is a really nice story. The plot is engaging, steady, and generally entertaining. You have many interesting characters here and I think its really nice how you have found a way to involve other readers by accepting their OCs.

I really like how you have introduced the POV of the story's possible antagonist. The son of the president, Alain, seems like he will make for a really good character to shake things up later. It will be interesting to see what you do with him. I predict that at some point of the story he will become a bit of an antihero rather than an enemy protagonist. I guess I'll have to keep reading to see.

Not much criticism to give really. I haven't seen a lot of grammar errors. Kudos to that. I think it would have done some chapters justice if they had been longer, but that's just my opinion. Maybe some of your later chapters are longer. Nice little motivational speech you wrote at the end of this chapter by the way. It complements how the main character feels internally. If it got you through tough times in the past, then it makes it all the more valuable I guess.

Again, good job with this story. I don't know if you've already finished or discontinued it or if you are still writing it now, but I just wanted to share how I felt about it. I'll be sure to read the rest, then leave another review at the last chapter. Good job!

I hope you update soon, this is an amazing story and I would like to see more

I've just read all of this story and from White Forest it got really addicting. I like your writing style and the story it's original so it's a plus!
I'm happy I got here just before the finale :D

Yay! New update! It's awesome to see Fallow again. I really like how you protrayed Giratina. I just wanna give him a big hug! Can't wait for the next update! :)

Phew~ I was glad that we got a chapter update, because I was starting to feel like have the story gone Hiatus or worse canceled.

But I feel relief now,

Okay, before reviewing, I need to get this out of my system:

YOU'RE ALIVE! YOU'RE ALIVE! OH THANK SWEET ARCEUS YOU'RE ALIVE! OH IT FEELS SO GOOD TO BE ALIVE!

*tearful hugs of joy!*

Okay, now that my emotional outburst is done, I must review this chapter like a gentleman. Deep breaths, man. Deep, deep breaths...

Finally, we get to see what happened to Fallow, and oh my sweet lordy-loo, nostalgia trip all over again! I loved exploring the Distortion World in Platinum. It was so weird and so out-of-this-world that is was cool!

Your portrayal of Giratina was beautiful here. Instead of giving in to insanity, he made the most of his time by controlling and reshaping the Distortion World into a place of weird harmony. For some reason, I kind of imagine him being voiced by Sir Christopher Lee, but maybe that's because he passed away very recently and I want to immortalize him somehow.

And wait, what? Tavon And Arabella are really N and Touko all along? MIND. BLOWN. ALL OVER THE FREAKIN WALLS.

And yay! The Light and Dark Stones are here at last! Albeit sealed in crystal. Nothing's ever easy, is it? And Fallow is left with a very tempting and difficult decision. Which life will she choose? Which stone will choose her? THE QUESTIONS, COMET!

This chapter was very well worth the wait, so don't beat yourself up over making us wait. Life happens. What can you do about it? I look forward to the next chapter, no matter how long it takes.

WHAT
OKAY
WAIT
WHA T. TAVON. AND. ARABELLA. I MEAN. I thought you meant that N and Touko WOULD show up, NOT THAT THEY WERE THERE THE WHOLE TIME AND WE NEVER KNEW. SO I LOVED THEM BEFORE BUT NOW THEY'RE JUST AMAZING.

OKAY MOVING ON. GIRATINA IS SO COOL. I didn't know what to expect but you've managed to pin down a personality on him and it's quite enjoyable and I love you. The distortion world was freakin' awesome, by the way.

OKAY BEST OF LUCK TO YOU. HAVE A GREAT LIFE FRIEND.

Oh hell no! You did not just do that!

Sure I love you for updating, but the cliffhanger was just too much.

So are we going to see the old rebellion gang again?

You updated? Holy god. It has been two months, Comet. Do you know how many feelings you've awakened within the dark recesses of my previously thought non-existant heart? Well, I'll express my feelings in song for you. [screeches like a pterodactyl for twelve hours] [it is a happy pterodactyl screech - one filled with joy and elation]

That being said, Tavon and Arabella. TAVON AND ARABELLA.

WHAT

LET ME TELL YOU I DID NOT SEE THAT COMING IN ANY WAY SHAPE OR FORM.

Also, the distortion world was certainly not what I expected at all. But it was pretty darn great. As for what Fallow will choose, I'm going to guess that she chooses to go back. But honestly, I can see it going the other way as well, and that worries me. What if she does? She'll never see Alain, or Luxio or any of the rebels again! And that would be incredibly sad.

Honestly, I can't wait for this to end, because I want to know what happens, but I also really don't want it to end, because then it will be over. At least there's a possibility of a short sequel.

And there was no one this chapter that I detested! *looks at chainsaw* What the hell am I supposed to do with this now?

*creepy smile*. Oh. I know.

[Audun hears a soft whirring sound - loud enough to be legible, soft enough that he can't tell where it's coming from. He turns around slowly. "Who's there?" he asks quietly, but no one responds. He turns again, and notices nothing. Dismissing the noise as an auditory hallucination, he sits down. What he doesn't notice is the shadowy figure in the corner - a young person with chin-length dyed dark red hair and an oversized navy blue trench coat. In their hands is a spinning chainsaw. They will strike soon. Not now. But soon.]

...ignore that I have no idea what I'm doing.

Seriously though, it's fine that you didn't upload for the past two months. College prep is way more important than fanfiction. Take all the time you need.

Tavon and Arabella... whoa. No, scratch that. I don't mean 'whoa', I mean WHOA.

MIND FRIGGIN' BLOWN, MAN.

Volan: "This story is coming to a close?! When were you going to inform me, huh?"

Aww, I knew you would come to love this story and your fellow actors, you big softie.

Volan: "No- I- what- I didn't-"

I'm so glad you're not dead! I mean... uh... of course, I never doubted that you were still alive, but... um... yeah, I'm glad. So very glad. As usual, you've impressed me with this chapter.

Because WHOA.

Yay! Your back! You have no idea how happy I was to find that you updated. I'm still smiling about it!

Oh man, oh man, the distortion world. This was sooooo good and I'm just here with no way to put into the right words at the moment but still. I love this. I love this so much.

What did she choose? I'd like to say she chose to go back, but I can also see it going the other way. Oh man, I'm not entirely sure how this will go.

Right now I'm just thinking about the crater Giratina made. I'm thinking that it was in Kanto maybe and scientist will be wondering what had happened to cause it. Some may think it was an intense Pokémon battle while others may say in was a sink hole and still there may be that one guy who swears it was aliens. I'm laughing too much at my own imagination. I need help.

Anywho, great chapter of splendid-ness from the awesome author of imagination. I really liked it and don't worry, it totally made up for the wait. Can't wait to see what you'll put up next! D

P.S. I get what you mean by writers block, it's a killer.