In that one moment and this afterward. You fixed the biggest problem of AGK ending and the series as a whole.

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To summarizeYour story is good. The plot and characters are very in depth but your writing style is very unique that it's a bit off putting.

• Give Tatsumi a break. As heart wrenching as it is to read such a grim story, no one wants to read about a punching bag continually getting beaten. Give him(and your readers) a reprieve. Hopefully, one in the form of a normal(as far as two insane people can go) date with Esdeath.

• Bol's death was obvious, since every single person that you've killed off is someone that gave spiritual/mental comfort to Tatsumi. It's a pattern now.

Oh God, I hope my last comment got through.

Ah, the error in this one was pretty glaring. You tend to repeat stuff quite a lot, but this time you repeated Seryu's question about the Sabers and Wave getting amazed at Tatsumi twice.

You could maybe pass it off as a continuation of that scene if you squint, but its just so obviously a reword of what happened the first time.

I'm pretty sure people have told you this so I'll ask... Why do you say "A part" as "Apart"?

Also, I recommend you get Grammarly to get rid of spelling errors and grammatical mistakes and the odd placement of your commas and such. It's paid yearly, but they offer a Weekly trial which you can just keep reapplying for one with non existent emails.

Pretty sure Wave met Yumi already LOL. They did go to the Palace together after all.

I enjoyed this chapter a lot. In the last chapter, Tatsumi's reactions to Esdeath were just hilarious and their interactions in bed were really great.

Chokuto

Huh. I almost forgot this was an anime and an Asian sword would just fit in. With Blue, Rose, Mathew, and Zero, this just felt like a western fiction and I just kept Tatsumi as Saber in my mind.

Huh... Only few mentions of Bulat?

I mean, his death was in no way Tatsumi's fault, but I feel like there should be more talk about his death.

Merry Christmas! Wow what a chapter. I'm gonn start at the end since it's fresher in my mind. I loved seeing Esdeath having some internal conflict, seeing that icy facade crack, if only slightly. Definitely agree that Tatsumi has never been sane in this story. He reminds me if many Roman generals who are now heralded as great men. In that time period, and in the setting of this story, these acts of decisive brutality makes sense.

On a larger note, I've always found your writing style to be unique. I've never experienced it before, and it really makes for a gritty, in the trenches read. I really enjoy it. The one thing I will mention as a criticism is the pacing. I know you like putting out massive 20,000 word chapters, but it seems like more should be getting done in them. I feel like this mob scene could have been taken care of much more concisely, without losing its impact. Though that's just my personal feelings on the matter. Your story is yours and you are free to present it as you wish. I think it's fantastic, and I've been following it for the past 2 years. I'm glad you are writing this truly epic tale, and I can't wait for more. I can't even begin to predict the aftermath of this purge, and that's a huge credit to you. Keep being amazing.

So... Will Tatsumi and Esdeath have a happy end in all of this or is it gonna be tragic?

Well, in our day and age, peiplt are getting slammed for just misgendering someone. (shrugs)

I would be shipping Seryu with Tatsumi but I like Esdeath more lol

Again, the story is truly wonderful, and I do hope the newer chapters have improved your writing style.

The story and writing quality is quite astounding, however I would say that your style of writing dialogues needs some work.

What happens when your characters talk to one another, we get the results first (how your characters feel, what they think) before the other character gets to act or say what they need to.

it's not a deal breaker for me, but it's quite an odd style of writing that I've yet to encounter.

What’s with the mob? Weren’t they here since they’d be set for life if they bagged one of Tatsumi’s officers? Are they trying to incite a mob mentality by acting as if they’ve committed horrific atrocities?

Why are there three separate speakers talking in one paragraph? It starts to feel congested when more than one person is speaking in the same paragraph.

I love Tatsami’s logic here. Rid them of the delusion that they ever have a chance of scoring kills on his soldiers, much less the higher ups.

Funny how the rebels from last chapter ended up being (partially) defeated and running off. There was enough conflict in this chapter to begin with, so their exclusion made for a nice change of pace.

Took an entire chapter to wrap up this little flash mob, and I as if it were too slow. It definitely didn’t need fifteen thousand words dedicated to building up Tatsumi letting lose and starting a bloodletting of grisly portions (it’s been clear as day that he’s totally done with the Capital’s crap for several chapters now). In the process of setting up a growing conflict, I find myself lost and growing irritated at how long the set-up goes on. There’s so many mentions of children crying and parents trying to comfort them that it loses it effect going forward. The constant repeating’s of “kill him, hang him, quarter him” became outright amusing when I thought that Tatsumi was throwing their words back in their faces and ordering them to slaughter the mob in the same way they wanted to do to him.

How long will Tatsumi’s legion hold their ground before raising a weapon? How long can Tatsumi take to give an order that narrows down to“Kill them all”? The pacing holds back this chapter the most, as despite all the time dedicated to it, it felt like little transpired. The mob was dispersed with little effort, Tatsumi acquired some more heads for his collection, the rebels run off to plot another day, and a certain saber’s brother turned coat officially.

Not the greatest chapter, but then since it’s a while since this was updated, perhaps this is feeding that opinion. Oh well. Here’s hoping this will the final, *final* straw for Tatsumi’s persona and that he ceases pretending to be something he’s not.

Merry Christmas to you too! Season’s greetings on this very, very early Christmas night!

Regarding Lubbock: Blending into the Capital would infinitely easier if Tatsumi didn’t know his name and face. If the Revolution’s willing to offer such prizes just for Tatsumi’s soldiers, then the Capital would pay a king’s ransom for Lubbock’s head. Even if it’s not enough to stop him, it should at-least hinder his attempts and make much harder to conduct business or sabotage.

If someone’s protesting against another, then that whole situation’s already taken a turn for the worst.

Tatsumi’s been off the rails this whole time? Makes a lot of sense, actually. Half way through? Hopefully it’s as grand as your vision of it is.