Reviews for The Unbound Soul |
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Subway chapter 7 . 2/1/2022 Kinda cringe with the random ass Japanese words. |
Victoria Santos1 chapter 42 . 1/28/2022 Continue the story please! |
adelalovesmadara chapter 17 . 1/14/2022 ... why why why do you litter the fanfics with wrong/awkward Japanese when it's not warranted... I mean, chigau? CHIGAU? |
adelalovesmadara chapter 1 . 1/14/2022 I wonder why would you even use Japanese though... |
adelalovesmadara chapter 2 . 1/14/2022 'Wakatta' is not polite nor formal. You wouldn't use that to your superiors, let alone the Hokage. In this kind of situation, just 了解 (ryoukai) meaning understood/I understand is acceptable. 了解しました (ryoukai shimashita) is better. Knowing Japanese while reading these kind of fanfics... really is a curse. |
dundun10 chapter 2 . 9/30/2021 weeb speak never fails to improve a fanfic, you had to watch hundreds of anime to learn these 15 words and by god will you utilize them! |
Ghost012 chapter 33 . 9/20/2021 my god this orochimaru trauma thing is getting so drawn out |
Ghost012 chapter 27 . 9/20/2021 like seriously a slap on the wrist for messing up on such an important mission, regardless of how small it would set a bad precedent? and they are supposed to anbu |
Ghost012 chapter 24 . 9/20/2021 it will be plain annoying if he gets away with a slap on the wrist |
Ghost012 chapter 13 . 9/20/2021 Dude you are seriously hilarious, chigau? For real? Why not just write it entirely in Japanese except it isn't Japanese but English words made to sound Japanese. What made you think making the most random of the words into Japanese was a great idea. Honestly I quite like the story but holy hell if the damn Japanese words does not piss me off. |
Ghost012 chapter 11 . 9/20/2021 Would be a great story if I didn't have to Google the damn words that you throw in Japanese. At least try sticking to just some words. Why tf do u want to type down so much shit into Japanese. |
Ghost012 chapter 4 . 9/19/2021 ah british people do love their tea, cant blame them, tea is great |
Ghost012 chapter 3 . 9/19/2021 umm ignore my rant on the previous chapter(if you could call it one), I was going through some...turbulent times. |
Kaiimei chapter 9 . 6/27/2021 I...ah...huh? I'm sorry, but what? The Hokage really just made them Chunin? I really don't think they are ready for that. Sure, they acted responsibly and efficiently to fight their opponents, but they are both six year olds, and I highly doubt they are on the level of Kakashi. I mean, you do you boo, but that seems exceptionally hasty, especially since the Hokage shouldn't know who they are, and thus shouldn't have bias. The ANBU Commander explicitly told their sensei not to make mention of their Kekkei Genkai in any reports, so Hiruzen wouldn't know that way, and their different appearances would ensure that he couldn't attribute them to those two boys. It's your story, and sorry for poking at it, but that just really struck me as a bizarre move. |
Kaiimei chapter 8 . 6/27/2021 Okay, one thing that always upsets me to see is when characters cough up blood. There are two feasible ways to make someone 'cough up' blood, and one less likely reason. The first is to break a rib and have it puncture their lung. This obviously fills said lung with blood which can be coughed up. Second is to hit them and make them bite their tongue. The less likely way is if they have ingested blood and you hit their stomach, forcing them to upchuck the blood. This is obviously less applicable, Anko is really the best example thanks to her actions at Training Ground 44. Kojimaru got hit in the stomach, so a lung puncture is out. There's a chance he bit his tongue, but since he coughed up blood instead of spat out blood or something it's not likely that, and I don't think he really drinks blood, so the only conclusion I can draw is anime trope. I get it, it's a common thing, but it just upsets me to see people writing 'he coughed up blood' because that is an incredibly serious injury. In the quantities anime characters cough up blood, lots of them should have punctured lungs, but the magical Arm Wipe no Jutsu usually solves their issues so whatever. Just...eh, whatever, it's not like it matters I guess P |