Reviews for The Unbound Soul |
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N7 Greek-Valkyrie chapter 42 . 7/21/2020 This is very well written. The character development and plot development is on point. I love the introduction of new characters and while I was hesitant on Tora having the Otter contact, it actually works really well. I can't wait to see what you do with this, and I hope it is still being continued? |
N7 Greek-Valkyrie chapter 18 . 7/19/2020 "Shark Bait, hooh haha" |
N7 Greek-Valkyrie chapter 16 . 7/19/2020 Awh, I wish there had been an Fuuton/Water contract that he could have gotten it would have been neat for him to have a flying one that also uses water. Seeing as he loves to be in the air |
Koneko027 chapter 6 . 7/7/2020 in the warnings if OCC means out of character shouldn't it be OOC (Out Of Character) |
huongdaoroma chapter 2 . 7/3/2020 So... how exactly did Harry learn the new world's language? |
Guest chapter 21 . 6/27/2020 I just came up with an idea for a one shot set sometime in this book, idk. Somehow kojimaru gets into the A:TLA world and meets iroh. They bond over tea and stuff, but I literally have to see kojimaru meet iroh, maybe set when kojimaru becomes old? Idk just a prompt. |
Guest chapter 7 . 6/22/2020 SPOILERS You said waist instead of waste, this is just before the tea ceremony when kojimaru is getting Shikoku to hurry up. |
Spellflame chapter 11 . 6/21/2020 It’s chapter 11? |
Guest chapter 6 . 6/21/2020 I agree. My only problem is that at that age (3-12) they wouldn’t have a history lecture for an hour! In my country, that wouldn’t happen in primary school (5-11) or even secondary school (12-17). Maybe a small talk for 5-10 minutes, but nothing classified as a lecture! Those are more reserved for university. To me a lecture is when the instructor is lecturing for an hour and is not interacting a lot, whilst the students take notes. Sometimes there will b at the end. Lectures aren’t made for children, they’re for adults. I kind of went on a rant about one word choice, but I couldn’t stop thinking about that throughout the chapter. For kids, you want it to be less talking to them, more interactive to help them understand. Maybe they can make a poster, or do something more creative, y’know. Other than that I’m loving it! |
Mr Arcturus Black II chapter 4 . 6/21/2020 I’m rereading this fanfic, and it’s sooooo good. I’m starting to remember inklings of it now! |
AkSpeed chapter 11 . 5/17/2020 He's weak for not being able to kill. Hopefully he stays super short and cute because they balance each other otherwise there's not point |
Evo-Kun chapter 42 . 2/25/2020 I love this story so much! Hope you come back to it and finish it best regards Evo-Kun |
R chapter 7 . 1/7/2020 And I ALREADY dislike what you are doing with Harry. A defensive/slippery type, as opposed to the powerhouse tenzo supposedly becomes. Aside from the fact that he is growing in response to the personal style of SOMEONE ELSE, Have you forgoten the fact that Tenzo was no close-combat type in canon? He was always the ninjutsu kind of fighter. Not to mention the fact that Mokuton usage tired him quickly. Shame. Kinda wanted to see thus play out. |
Sypho Dias chapter 12 . 10/8/2019 C'mon! Why aren't they ANBU yet?! They were supposed to join ages ago! And you are talking utter bullshit. This is completely cannon. When are you going to expand on the HP universe?! |
Sypho Dias chapter 11 . 10/8/2019 He's still a chuunin?! C'mon! And a ninjato would have been a much cooler weapon! Short swords are so uncool. They have kunai for that. |