Reviews for Atonement
MagniThorsen chapter 27 . 5/11
Fuck. I thought it was only Marvel that pulled this shit.
Guest chapter 35 . 4/10
The more I read the more things in here get rather stupid to explore and the more they grow annoying. Things like the Tenders which fails to make sense, the entire alternative Earth thing was a poor decision. Hell, a lot of the stuff is. Honestly at this point - well even at the beginning Madison was an OOC. Now it’s just throwing shit that wouldn’t happen or even exist in canon into the kid to make your special protagonist even more special. Pathetic really.
Guest chapter 11 . 4/9
Trevor should outright shot for being an absolute dumbass. Education and various facts about America means at one point if not more during the year, documentaries about Teacher get played over television and such or he gets taught about it in school. All to ensure everyone is constantly reinforced vs Master type Parahumans. The fact that Trevor can’t recognize the villain Teacher who caused a Vice President of the US to be assassinated is essentially an SOD. Especially when it’s known that he outright Masters those who get his pets. Trevor should have just committed suicide given how useful he is. Aka not useful and only making things worse because he’s trash.
gred did it chapter 10 . 3/27
this is very good (surprised voice) very much au but thats ok if you were to rename pretty much every thing you could probably make this an actual fiction not fanfiction and on the front you could put inspired by worm and then others would mooch off of your hard work to creat fanfiction please don't stop creating fanfiction vomitgushwordsofencouragement
SisterofNightmare chapter 8 . 9/4/2020
That last bit. That was masterful. Full respect
Caver Floyd chapter 35 . 7/20/2020
This has got to be one of the best Worm fanfics I’ve ever read. Too bad it’s unfinished. Listing all the things about the story that are awesome would take way too long so I’ll just mention the few things I didn’t like.

1) Jalopy is OP. Nuff said
2) The fact that Tether can create so many of her lines at once makes her really powerful in terms of the blunt trauma she can inflict. When she first got her power, I thought there would be a limitation that she could only push/pull one line at once, and that she would have to practice a lot making lots of quick changes in momentum of different things using different lines to compensate.
3) I seriously doubt a matchup between Faultline’s Crew and the Siberian on Manton’s home turf would end completely in Faultline’s favor, even with surprise on their side. Newter might be mobile enough to evade Sib but everyone else would have to rely on Murk to keep their game of keepaway going.
4) Aisha’s second trigger power is OP. All she has to do is double tap everyone at the initial meeting for the next Endbringer battle and she will have access to a bunch of new powers when the battle is over. If she practices switching powers quickly during combat, she is now the most powerful cape in Brockton Bay, excluding Pandora and Contessa.
aljash chapter 32 . 6/4/2020
Just read this for the fourth time now. Shame it hasn't finished but still one of my favorites.
GreatWyrmGold chapter 1 . 4/19/2020
Ugh, Madison's banter. I get that she's new, but unless she wants to advertise that, she should probably work a little harder on her Spider-Man impression.
Still, seeing the cheesy lines turned against an increasingly confused/irate Shadow Stalker was oddly satisfying.
EowynLuna chapter 35 . 2/1/2020
I have enjoyed your work. You manage to make it as dark as the original worm, while giving it so much more hope. I see that you have not updated in almost 4 years, so i will assume that this is discontinued, but i appreciate what you have written
Nyxeka chapter 1 . 1/1/2020
Cute story idea but god damn is that power OP.

A. Why doesn't she use it on people?

B. Why not just smash lung with cars and trains and whatever else there is? Mads could just attach lines to the ground under a target, give a massive tug, and launch anything at them. Bonus points if she launches whatever it is in the air first.
perlhaqr chapter 35 . 8/24/2019
Bugger. They really need to put "Don't get too into this, it doesn't have an ending" warnings up. :-/
perlhaqr chapter 29 . 8/24/2019
OK, I know I'm several byears/b late with this comment, but...

i"It is your spatial sense, Tether-Friend," Delta remarked quietly from where she was sitting. The game was still held in her lap. "The same thing which allows you a subconscious awareness of the world around you in order to assist your own movement becomes blocked and confused while within the small confines of this moving vehicle. It is attempting to direct you, but is disturbed by the fact that it is the vehicle that is moving, not you yourself."

"We thought it might be something like that." I hesitated, frowning a little thoughtfully. "I wonder if I can ever practice enough to get over that. It'd be nice to be able to drive sometimes."/i

Motorcycle?

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BTW: Really like the story. Been reading it nearly nonstop for the last several days.
jmcdavid chapter 8 . 7/30/2019
I can only imagine Director Piggot's reaction to this.

Of course she wouldn't be happy with an off-the-books operation like this one. But the fact remains, doing it off-the-books was literally the only way to capture Coil and shut down his plans.
Neko-tama chapter 35 . 5/5/2019
This story is amazing. It's such a shame that you seem to have dropped it for some time now. I just wish I knew how you meant to deal with scion here before you stopped writing this.
JokersLastLaugh chapter 35 . 3/18/2019
This is one the best stories i have read and i have thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece of work over the last week or two(would have been quicker but work) and just reading it any chance i could get.

The characterisation is beautiful, natural and so flowing that this seems such a real progression if this is what really happened in worm.

The cliffhangers that you have now left at the end of this chapter has made me gasp and curse because it is so huge and a shock. I am sad that it seems like you have left this amazing story because i know that others and myself would love to see this great story updated.

I shall follow and favourite this story along with favouriting you also in hope that in time you will update this wonderful and compelling story.
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