Reviews for Mass Effect: Synthesis |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Nice Fic overall. I liked that you took the time to show how the future unfolded over truly ludicrous time scales |
![]() ![]() ![]() damn the diving concept is epic |
![]() ![]() ![]() harsh plans... hopefully they don't go through with them all the way... |
![]() ![]() Glad I was able to find this and read it again. It really is one of my favorite ME fanfics. Thank you for writing it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() still great |
![]() ![]() ![]() Damn that battle got brutal. Good to see the batarian captain had some respect for his foe |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really enjoying this this far |
![]() ![]() ![]() This chapter was a tad confusing, I'm not really sure entirely wats happening |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm very confused. You explained that the SOCL are 'one mind sharing two bodies'. That means that when Shepard and Harbinger underwent synthesis there should have only been a single merged being remaining. Despite this you keep refering to seperatw thoughts by Shepard and Harbinger even after synthesis. You keep switching between he and her and even made their name unneccesarily difficult by naming their bodies Shepard Harbinger and Harbinger Shepard instead of just having one name for the combined being and a seperate one for the individual bodies. It doesn't feel like synthesis. Merely an exchange between two individuals that are still individuals. You even seemed to allude to Shepard and Harbinger having sex (which would be especially weird considering they should be only a single mind that is now apparantly having sex with itself). I love the idea for this fic! That the reapers would have already been made to undergo synthesis by someone else is interesting. It feels like you're unwilling to let go of either Shepard or Harbinger as individuals though. They don't feel like a mixed existence. It just feels like a story about Harbinger where Shepard occasionaly makes a remark. Using dates has been a great way to show passage of time but I think that it makes most of your 'non-story paragraphs' feel like summaries instead of writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I finally finished reading this master piece there arent many story that have a satisfying ending it is one that makes you kinda sad it's over but it feels right that it is well done |
![]() ![]() ![]() nooo grunt you poor fooool |
![]() ![]() ![]() awww nooo not grunt run run while yo- |
![]() ![]() ![]() the line "jarra dared to believe" gave me chills |
![]() ![]() ![]() dang it would be cool to read a side story of of a Diver in all this |
![]() ![]() ![]() well dang I was excited to see the turians actually rally for once |