Reviews for Resolution |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Actually, it doesn't need improvement at all. I found it plenty suspenseful, and the action was really just right. Sometimes, less is more, if you know what I mean. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think you're thinking of Lilfred of Stinchcombe, the "founding sire," so to speak, of the Potter line. He was called "the potterer" by his neighbors/clients, because he could frequently be seen "pottering about" his garden. You're not the only one who's made the connection between him and the "hopping pot;" I've run into a fair number of other writers who have mentioned it in their notes. (He was also the inventor of a potion that eventually became known as Skele-Gro. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Don't know what the guest reviewer had in mind, but the first thing that pops into my head when I read turkey, marshmallows, and flames in juxtaposition with each other, is roasting. You can roast turkey over flames, and I'm sure you've at least heard of toasting/roasting marshmallows over a campfire or a fireplace. Not going to bother hunting for the particular guest review, though. The second thing I thought of isn't nearly as innocuous. ;D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Draco was out of control in canon, too; more Gryffindor than Slytherin..."Slytherdor"? "Slythindor"? "Gryfferin"? ;D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Fantastic story. I really loved it and I love your writing style. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really enjoyed this story. I love the new friends, wish Harry hadn't been cold to his first friends, but I understand that friendships don't always last. But everything else? Perfect |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great plot, but the excessive vocabulary is unnecessary and distracting. “Mildly chagrined”. “Answered sardonically. Replied succinctly”… Things like this pull you out of the story. There’s a reason a simple “said” is so popular and it’s because it disappears into the background, and lets you focus on the action rather than the words themselves. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story, thanks for sharing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I did enjoy your story. Thank you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great read, one thing in this chapter, either Gryffindor lost points or the snitch ended up being worth 140 points instead of the regulation 150. Otherwise this fic is amazing so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it. Not much dialog, but a wonderful story nonetheless. Keep writing as life allows |
![]() ![]() ![]() You just had to go and make me cry. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I enjoyed reading this. You write well. And thank you for your good spelling, punctuation, and grammar - much better than the average fanfiction! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it, thanks! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for writing and sharing this wonderful story! I really like that Harry is far more level-headed and smart than in canon. I think that if he had better friends like in this story he would have thrived more! I will definitely go read the sequel now. 3 |