Reviews for Champion of a Distant Dream
Frank Horrigan chapter 22 . 9/26/2018
Well we have two choices. We send for the greatest killing machine of all time, Casca the Eternal Mercenary,the man who killed Jesus on the cross and has fought on every front for the last 2000 years. Or we can shell the planet from orbit.
Ramax Viscurio chapter 22 . 9/26/2018
I am sorry to say this, buut, what? Wtf? This feels wrong, like totaly wrong. I don't know what it is. Maybe the knowledge that this obviously is some kind of illusion, but still? ?!
Bloodyrath chapter 22 . 9/26/2018
Saber is an antagonist?! But..But...Lilianna dead? Huhhhhhh?!..
Mernom chapter 22 . 9/26/2018
Well, things went to shit. I'm looking forward to seeing how you deal with this, since the setup makes me think that reality won't undo itself this time.
Paxloria chapter 22 . 9/26/2018
Didn't it take too long for Emiya Shirou to pull himself together & return?
~ And why didn't he regain his Power as a Creator God (that he got at the alternate ending of the previous story) now that he remembers?
~ And why say that he is a Fake that usuped powers? Isn't the enimy using a power that should originally belong to HIM who obtained the 6th True magic and sacrificed his humanity to make the SWORD that would beat Angra minyu even though it ment HE would be cast out of the world as an acendent god? Wasn't he suddenly grabed and downloaded into this world during that key moment?
Neededsomething chapter 22 . 9/26/2018
I'm not really sure what to think? It's all written well and i guess it continues with what was set up, but it kind of feels like you just don't care about it? Or even that things were forced to come to this too quickly? I don't know maybe its just too grimdark for me and i'm just projecting my displeasure with how everything happened.
gbabada chapter 22 . 9/26/2018
Been a long time since the last update. Great development and awesome cliffhanger. Hope the next chapter comes out soon.
mx2432 chapter 22 . 9/26/2018
Please let Lilianna survive, her and Shirou's relationship has gone so far. It would be a shame to end it this early.
Bigreader in The Omniverse chapter 22 . 9/25/2018
Alright I'm extremely confused by this did Erica never come back to life after she was killed the first time cuz if I remember the story correctly didn't Shiro somehow bring her and a bunch of other people back to life? And if she did die a second time when? And I think you're really arguing semantics with that whole Shiro isn't really Shiroy cuz he clearly is bits of the original that have been glued together and given a new body after his adventures in the first story this isn't the copy this is the original for the most part. I mean he's not the sword of origin character we are seeing in The Familiar of Zero crossover. And you know this saber and other Sherou thing don't make sense if this world doesn't have a Shirou Emiya then how is it that he is a descended heretic god with saber and why is she calling herself saver and not something like King Arthur? Are you ever going to explain how there's a saber and a sherou in this world who are heretic gods?
reality deviant chapter 22 . 9/25/2018
Erica being a fake was a total surprise for me. I cant help but wonder what happened to the real one.

Did the Campione died off without returning? if so its a great shame. and poor Godou, he didn't deserve what happened to him... i was hoping he would get some happiness with Erica. any chance he will be reborn?

Am i to take it that the main deity of this world is the one making cycles of CAmpione and heretic gods, and ending them with 'king of the end'?
piddle chapter 22 . 9/25/2018
the new chapter was great though I hope liliana is still alive
Aurain Orimura chapter 22 . 9/25/2018
Hoping Liliana survives. I don't like Godou already and killing her off would just make me more disappointed than angry at this point.
plums chapter 22 . 9/25/2018
This felt entirely like an outline that wasn't properly fleshed out... especially that last "section", if you can even call it that.

It honestly feels to me that you're not really writing a story, and more like you write vignettes that are loosely related. Even within the confines of each scene, we never get proper resolution, there's always more information we wish we had, and there's always questions that are never answered. At least over the entire arc of this "All Heaven's Evil" group of chapters.

In general I would really just describe reading this as Unsatisfying at this point. I just feel like this could've been so much 'more', but ideas / concepts / people / dialogue that could've been fleshed out more were never given the chance.
Aetemus chapter 22 . 9/25/2018
What on earth just happened ... is this meant to be a parody chapter? Or have you grown tired of writing this story and are trying to end it early?

Seriously... it's ok for a story to have twists and turns, but this is a complete 180 in direction. I'm still rereading the chapter, trying to understand just what went down.
skrapsynneh chapter 22 . 9/25/2018
Darn, I am only an undergraduate in those courses with nothing to show for it. Congrats on all of your hard work. This seriously escalates, but I always enjoyed . Thanks for the chapter. I look forwards to more.
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