Reviews for One Good Turn Deserves Another |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I think this will always be one of your best works. I always come back to it and it's just as good as it was the first time. A fun, exciting read through and through. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm seriously confused why Blake and Jaune would be punished for sparring in the room dedicated to holding spars. Blake said just last chapter that older students do it all the time, and if she can set the arena to be controlled by her scroll then it isn't a "sealed room with dangerous machinery" - because I'd hope there would be more security to using this "dangerous machinery" than just having a scroll. What exactly is the "dangerous machinery" anyway? The arena shields? The aura monitors that show everyone what their aura levels are? Not like they snuck into the boiler rooms or something. How is it a "sealed room" when older students (in a combat academy) use the room (made for learning to fight in a combat academy) for personal spars all the time? Maybe I'm just stupid for overfocusing on this but the first scene seems to only exist for drama and is completely inconsistent with the rest of the world. Would make more sense if they were punished for ignoring Blake's medical warning - that is actually plausible. Neither Blake nor Jaune cared about getting into the room, and there was so little narration focus on it I assumed they just opened a door (but clearly I was wrong, they blew open the solid-steel door with explosives they secretly stole from Nora to get into the "sealed room"). What /was/ a concern for Jaune was Blake's recent release from the infirmary and if she was okay to fight. His concerns are proven right, but the spar also helped him learn and also with his confidence in a fight. There's the conflict for him right there: the spars with Blake help him, but also has the possibility of hurting Blake because she's recovering from lung damage. He knows he needs the help and fast, but he really doesn't want to hurt his friends. Pyrrha and Jaune never got in trouble for fighting on the roofs of Beacon, where there is less than zero safety equipment and a significant falling hazard. Clearly, it is less dangerous to fight there than in the room made for people to fight safely in. |
![]() ![]() ![]() After binging 70% of coeurs work, I'd say this one is top 3, top 5 at worst. Story was good and not contrived, not to many spelling errors, the romance didn't feel that forced, I enjoyed the story overall, good weekend reader. |
![]() ![]() ![]() What a heroes death. The male fantasy put to paper. Ah to die in agony for those you love. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love the realism of the state Jaune is in. I unfortunately have found myself in a violent situation and defended myself but afterwards i was so fucking jittery and shaking like a leaf. It took a while to come down off the adrenaline high and convince myself i was good. Obviously it wasnt a wilderness survival thing but ive felt that sensation of every cell of my body in a panicked defense mode slowly stopping its guard after the danger has passed and Couer describes it so well the goddamn wordsmith he is |
![]() ![]() ![]() The exageratted swagger of a Mistrali teen |
![]() ![]() ![]() I literally fell on my hands and knees screaming no as soon as i saw the part of Ruby crying against Yang. Oh fuck that hurt. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ITS THE OLIPHAUNTS. Lol LOTR aside good chapter. I FUCKING knew the rain would become a problem. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Liked this chapter. Annnd ohhhh boy did I like the previous ones. I for one agreed with the fact that Phyrra's combat versatility and years of training allowed her to be a great technical fighter, Especially with her semblance. And Blake stating that Jaune shouldn't be exactly emulating Phyrra's style is what my friends have said for a long time. And the end of that fight... Oh boy my friends were into fanfics, two of them would have gone crazy happy with the *Debauchery* that was being lead to. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter. Liked how you handled Jaune still being in survival mode even after getting back until he knew Blake was okay. One of my cousins who had been in Afghanistan dealt with that after a ambush. He won't talk about the ambush itself. But he would discuss how he felt after his squads rescue. Verrry similar to how you had Jaune be in Mr. Ozpins office. Also RUBY CHARGES IN FIRST! Lol was gonna wonder if I'd be her or Weiss giving his cheek a peck. But damn Ruby went for the lips. Honestly I was a huge Lancaster shipper in the early years. Now I'm more of a WhiteKnight shipper. |
![]() ![]() You can't just help to make everyone but Jaune usefull or badass it's one of the most infuriating things about your style of writing. |
![]() ![]() You really can't help but make Jaune a batch in every story |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know im Preeeetty late to the party but we'll done on the first chapter. Love when the characters have a Actual reason for wanting to interact. Also in the notes you made good points about the Grimm. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Damn, nice fic. |